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PdeV's Name That Tune - A Mother's Music
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PdeV's Name That Tune - A Mother's Music |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
a found poem A Mother’s Music (To a Mother from her child) When first we met, warm in your arms, Your home-made lyrics sang me to sleep. When I grew to love and laid down my head, Your sweet melodies had me dreaming deep. Mom, in the attics of my life, full of phantoms quite unreal, Full of scents no mind may realize and lights no eyes can feel, Full of tastes no tongue can fathom and of touches that none can see, When my ears were full of phatic noises, I heard you sing to me. I have spent my lifetime seeking all the lyrics yet unsung, Bent my ears to hear the music before the notes became unstrung, Closed my eyes to all the madness, and things that used to be, When there are no keys to play, I still hear you sing to me. In the book of love’s illusions where all the words are writ in blood, Where all the pages are my days and all the nights are but a flood Of lost emotions with no wings to fly above to truly see; All along life’s traveled measure You were there to sing to me. In the mystic span of dreamdust, when I’m nearest life and death, When my secrets are exposed, with each lie & truth still on my breath; When my hope is gone or my anger’s strong or my life’s a Christmas tree, Whether I harmonize or criticize, you still dream and sing for me. When next we meet, as when first we met, Your endearing songs -- though still off-key -- Whether abstract or blank; free or rhymed -- I shall always hear you sing to me. Panne © 1997 Please ask before copying my work or using for greeting cards. Thank you. Panne |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Dear Panne... OK... both barrels... Fantastic & Beautiful! Would that I could write such. I would say I like this or I like that, but to single any one part out over another would be to deminish the whole. This is truly the best I have read this day. Thank you for sharing... I bow to you and yours with great sincerity. PS... I use to sing to my daughters when they where little "American Pie"... I know, a strange choice, but I knew most all of the words by heart and it was long enough that I never got board singing the same thing over and over again. Peace! [This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
"In the mystic span of dreamdust, when I’m nearest life and death, When my secrets are exposed, with each lie & truth still on my breath; When my hope is gone or my anger’s strong or my life’s a Christmas tree, Whether I harmonize or criticize, you still dream and sing for me." This is my favorite part, particularly the first two lines. Excellent Panne! Mike |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
Dear Andrew, Thank you so much. I just found a challenge in netpoets and I thought I'd enter this in answer to Poet deVine's Name that tune challenge. I don't know if this meets the requirements but it is one of the 3 pieces I thought of when I read about it. It was a challenge given to me a while back by my son after a conversatin about my 'singing' to my kids. He sent me the lyrics to 3 Grateful Dead songs and challenged me to write a found poem off each one. This was my reply to GD's Attic of My Life. I have still not heard the song myself and the lyrics were only 4 verses long I believe but this was the outgrowth from his challenge. And since my piece is not even close - as I remember - to GD - I will take the bow to your comments. P.S. I sang American Pie too - it was easy to remember and had great meaning to me then and now. Mike, Thank you so much. I am very glad you like this piece too. Especially that part - that came from nowhere - the rest was work - lol. I tried to make this be a piece about when I first met my children after their birth to when we meet again in the mother's death AND also a tribute to my Gran and her singing and when I will see her again at her funeral. So I was writing as a child to a mom and as a mom wishing my children felt this way about me so I think I got lost sometimes but can't figure out if or where I changed povs - I am too close to it and haven't given it much thought for some time now. Thank you both for your input. I really appreciate it. Panne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Well, you certainly MET the challenge!! This poem is absolutely wonderful. I issued the challenge for a specific reason. We would like to do a section on 'name that tune' for our newsletter (it all ties in to a music theme). If we get enough of these to make a section, may we publish this poem? Please let me know. (If you don't know about the newsletter, please go to the main site and find the link to Digital Passions). Thanks! |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
PdeV, Thank you- I am glad you liked this piece. Sounds like a fun section in the newsletter. I have signed up to get it today and look forward to reading my first one. Would be interested to know if back issues are available too. Panne |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Panne...remember this one too and as I'm sure I've mentioned before...only wish I could write as well as you do. jwesley |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent poem... it left me envious of your memories. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Panne, So far I haven't disappointed in any of your poems. Excellent. |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Poet de Vine, How often does the newsletter come out and when is the next one due. Panne |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
bump for future reading... |
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