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Sunrise
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Sunrise |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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SUNRISE Like the breaking sunrise, Your friendship creeps to me, Slowly warming, illuminating Things I hope to Be. And when the sun is hiding, (Most folks have gone to bed) I think about the things we've shared And things that go unsaid. I know you want your freedom, Most times I want mine too; But if some time you change your mind I'll cash mine in for you. And if the sun grows colder And turns into a stone; I'll shelter in my memories The warmth that I have known.... So as we both grow older And wrinkles carve my face, I'll not forget that sunrise With things that take its place. "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Mike, this is stunning. I applaud! Am saving, I just loved it.  "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is irresistable. Joyce |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
REally like this! I couldn't help but think about the epitome, surely, of a happy relationship is to enjoy freedom together! I do have to say, I became a little confused with the last two lines. It's probably me and that I need a nap, but if I take a nap, I won't sleep well tonight, right? |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you all, glad you enjoyed this one. As for the last two lines, from my perspective they are clear if you read them with the previous stanza in mind. If the friendship dies the warm memories of it will not be lost even though other friendships and loves may come along. Mike "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oftimes, it is the memory of the sunrise that keeps one the warmest. Very nicely written, Mike. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Mike...this is lovely.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wow |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PackRatMike~ This is positively enchanting. A wonderful read aloud piece. Delicious lilting rhyme ... and your last verse just sums it up perfectly. What a marvelous outlook ... Well done, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Meadowmuse...and thank goodness, I have many of them. Thanks for reading. Elizabeth...thank you. Irish Rose...thank you. Marge...Wonderful comments, Marge...thank you. Mike |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Why is it your words always find that place in my heart that just needs touching? "I have learnt silence from the talkative, toleration from the intolerant, and kindness from the unkind; yet strange, I am ungrateful to these teacher |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Why thank you Paula, I'm glad I am able to touch hearts with my words.*S* |
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