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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2001-05-16 09:36 AM

One fine day the sun will shine
And that one day I will be fine,
Till then I will bide my time
And wait for the bells to chime.

And in the present now
I am waiting
with gathered wits
of educated patience
like a chess player
contemplating
the irony
of the sixty four blocks
of even and odd squares
painted clearly
in alternating black and white
and the moves of inertia-afflicted
sixteen 'men' --
who need to be moved by a force -
eight common pawns and
eight special ones,
one of whom is King,
who knows not that the power
he has is given by his master,
the player matching wits
who is himself controlled
by an more greater power
which some call logic, and others
chances of destiny -
interspersed with
moments of decisions --
and at the same time
relatively existent
to what his opponent,
feels, thinks, plays and commits,
who is also controlled by
the same greater power
of his individual logic
or some roll of dice
among the clouds of luck.

In contemplation, I stand
Awaiting patience's reward,
Mindless of time's changing hands
Awaiting my better cards.

Yes, one beautiful day
the dice would roll in my favour
way above amongst the white cotton pods
and then it will rain
through the shining sun
as if wanting to cleanse
the dust in the sky
and out would come a rainbow
that would fill the sky
with vibrant colours
instead of
the now present contrast of
black and white.

That's when the blind men will see
The beauty of life to be,
That's when the lilies will dance
In life's newly given chance.

(*!°)

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 05-17-2001).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-05-16 09:40 AM

Hey my buddy! Loved your chessboard analogy here, and the perspective of power reminded me of looking in a mirror that faces a mirror--

excellent piece here and I hope that one fine day is soon for you!

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

2 posted 2001-05-16 11:34 AM

I must echo Serenity....a great analogy all around...

well done Sudhir!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-05-16 11:41 AM

I saw those clouds and loved the metaphor...

Kathleen

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2001-05-16 04:20 PM

Your metaphors were superb in this piece, I loved everything about this poem.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2001-05-16 06:24 PM

And it seems like I spend lots of time waiting for my desires and goals to find fulfillment...meanwhile while I am waiting I try to appreciate the small beauties that surround me...James

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2001-05-17 10:55 AM

O Serene One, Thank you for your wonderful response... so glad that you came along

Decaflame, thank you so much

Kathleen, so happy that you came and you saw... thanks a lot

Mysteria, thank you so much for the superb... and for reading of course

James, That is an excellent way to live, my friend... thank you

Regards,
sudhir

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