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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I see you In the sting Of swift emersion As if something, stunning stroked the darkness A light glows my eyes blink back levied tears You are not real. You seem as if divine. I’d rush to meet you But you’d simply fade Into the canvas The stars, keepsakes of my loss I ache so I lived through hunger’s path Lay me down I’ll feed you grapes of our past love [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ohhhh Lordy Walty, I just absolutely love this. Excellent my friend excellent! Maree  |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Oh Walt, you got it bad man....I hope she knows you feel this way. Rave on, dear poet...rave on and feed her those grapes. INclan |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This is absolutely marvelous Walt...a WOW if ever there was one! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you guys I appreciate it Memories all alone in the moonlight yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Some memories can only be cherished by the light of the moon...well done Walt...you know |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah....this is so different than what you usually post sir. It's dramatic in tone and the format suits this subject. Well done!!  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Walty, I had to come back for another read this time it is going into my library. btw, love the change in format Maree |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Walt, Quite a premonition (we can hope) you had in your poem.... Someday, perhaps, we will lay back and be fed grapes by beautiful goddesses. One can certainly dream. Nice poem. Bob <>< |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OH, Walt~ Absolutely STUNNING ! I admire your versatility ~ This is perhaps one of the 'best' yet ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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thepoeticplumber Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 185 |
You have a great flow with your words. I really enjoyed it. Thanks, Roger |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Walt! Great job! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you so much for the kind words yuh i love writing like this o yuh! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent work, Walt... Regards, Sudhir |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
This is so pretty Walt |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
As if something, stunning stroked the darkness the above stanza is a great image and feeling as is the whole poem! eyem crazy...i kinda wondered what the levied tears tasted like in the 4th stanza? this reminds me of total darknes on the dunes off the coast. quite a thought! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this is truely great Walt |
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