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Mysteria
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0 posted 2001-05-15 04:40 AM





~*~ Dreamers ~*~

How soon this life takes memories,
And turns sweetness to despair,
They fall, like mighty waves,
Upon the burdens that we bare.

It's not wise to be a fool too long,
Too long in dreaming still,
It's hard to face reality,
Heart fights against brain's will.

A wiser mind claims memories,
And sketches them to gray,
Obscuring hues with daunted breath,
Then buries them away.

And if you do not listen,
And you hear only a sweet song,
You then are praying so in vain,
While hanging onto memories long!

Soon smiling through tormented tears,
And understanding feign,
Your arms still in devotion fold,
To stifle out your pain.

At last you hold a looking glass,
To feeble your ways of old,
But the crumpling child inside you,
Wishes you had never told.

How soon this life breaks dreamers,
And how foolish can they be,
To let sorrow their companion stay,
Life's hard on dreamers such as me!

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art: Jim Warren "Island Dream"
~ www.jimwarren.com ~

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~

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ATelamon
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1 posted 2001-05-15 06:07 AM


What a very nice piece
excellent message
good flow and the multi-media works quite well.

This is very very nice, and your wisdom learned shines through.'

My compliments

"The most redeeming facet of life is that we have the comfort of knowing it will end. Death doth love equally."

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-05-15 06:17 AM


"It's not wise to be a fool too long,
Too long in dreaming still,
It's hard to face reality,
Heart fights against brain's will."

I really enjoyed your sentiments in this thought-provoking piece Mysteria!  I love to ponder the depths of reality verses dreams ... you've penned these thoughts beautifully, very nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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3 posted 2001-05-15 06:37 AM


OMG, Sharon...you have me wiping tears already this morning...what a beautiful poem.....
"At last you hold a looking glass,
To feeble your ways of old,
But the crumpling child inside you,
Wishes you had never told.

How soon this life breaks dreamers,
And how foolish can they be,
To let sorrow their companion stay,
Life's hard on dreamers such as me!"


WOWZERS.....How realistic is this????????????
Absolutely BEAUTIFUL, MY LADY!!!!!!!!
Luv ya muches, dawn


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4 posted 2001-05-15 08:26 AM


There is a lot of wisdom in these words, and I should ponder on them awhile...

well done, Mysteria...

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5 posted 2001-05-15 10:26 AM


Atelamon: I am so glad you liked it - I was going to bed, and went to look at Jim Warren's art, and poof - that darn ole muse did her thing!

Kit: Thank you - I have done a look of living, made a lot of mistakes, and looked in that glass more times than I care to tell you, so I better be getting smarter soon!  I am so flattered you came to read my work, thank you again.

Martha: Glad you liked it, see above comment re the wisdom of a fool who did dream one too many times.

Decaflame: What is that saying, "Too late schmart???  Somewhere between dreams and reality a lot of happiness gets lost.

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6 posted 2001-05-15 01:27 PM


How soon this life breaks dreamers,
And how foolish can they be,
To let sorrow their companion stay,

Not much I can add to that but AMEN... from one who now deals with nightmares! *S* This is beautiful, Mysteria... sad but soothing.

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7 posted 2001-05-15 01:40 PM


Mysteria,

Life places obstacles in our paths, but it doesn't break dreamers.  That is something we do to ourselves.  I hope that you'll continue to pursue your dreams and believe that you can surmount those obstacles, my friend.  I much enjoyed this fine piece.  

Michael

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"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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8 posted 2001-05-15 01:43 PM


This is a finely written work...

Thanks for sharing...

regards,
sudhir

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9 posted 2001-05-15 04:42 PM


Soon smiling through tormented tears,
And understanding feign,
Your arms still in devotion fold,
To stifle out your pain.

At last you hold a looking glass,
To feeble your ways of old,
But the crumpling child inside you,
Wishes you had never told.

How soon this life breaks dreamers,
And how foolish can they be,
To let sorrow their companion stay,
Life's hard on dreamers such as me!
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Mysteria this is an emotinally charged piece here...
emotions wrapped in rhyme and cadence done divine
and as always your presentation of picture and melody add to the poetrys pleasures.
very well done poetess  

tis never easy being a moth,
tis not easy being the flame.
what some never see is--
sometimes ... most times ...
they are one in the same.

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10 posted 2001-05-15 10:11 PM


suthern: know what cures the nightmares?  A new dream - go for it girl!

Auguste: Just a poem, my muse working overtime, I always dream!

Sudhir: I wish to thank you for your lovely comment.

Janet Marie: You are just too sweet did you know that?  Thank you for "dissecting my piece" you are a wonderfully gifted poet yourself.

Mabel A. Dilley
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11 posted 2001-05-15 10:38 PM


The poem and the thought is just flat out beautiful. Now on to the picture: I knew that blonds had more fun!

"I am not now that which I have been."

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12 posted 2001-05-15 10:59 PM


Thanks Mabe - was for Dawn!  I think she liked it don't you?  Hey...blonde's do have more fun told you!
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13 posted 2001-05-15 11:38 PM


Mysteria~
The presentation is wonderfully done.

Ahhhh ! Realistically speaking ... a dreamer I will always be !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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14 posted 2001-05-16 01:03 AM


Marge: Me too...forever the dreamer!  Thanks for your fingerprint in my sandbox!

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~

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