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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2001-05-14 11:06 PM

The Term of Kelly-Mae
©2001 C.G. Ward

she stares at the ceiling
              and tries not to think.
- the pictures, though, are gone.
still,
       drowning can’t cover her memories,
and drinking can’t answer her pain.

‘oh give me the power
     free me of these demons,
  and please, oh please,
       lend me the strength
    to abide even just today’

so she cries at the water
             to step from the brink.
- but darkness shades the dawn.
still,
        friendship can’t fathom her miseries,
and crumbling can’t wash the stains.

oh she screams at the skies
and rails at the night
         burning her life,
freezing the core of her despair
she wonders what ashes
       can counter her prayers
   and claims
that beating can free her sacrifice,
    shake the pillars of helplessness

stumbling to the valley,
choking on the dust of experience
     she falls

Sorry to be plaguing you with this stuff, but as I've said before - 'There are times when even the mightiest must bow to inevitability.'

Peace,

C

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-05-14 11:18 PM

Okay. That's it. You are driving me nuts.
If I have to STAPLE the curtains back up tomorrow, I will do so...

There was a bit of intricacy to the rhymes of this that I loved...wove like musical notation Chris...this one too, I keep.

studying YOU now. grin

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-05-14 11:23 PM

Downright miserable misery if I ever read it. Fascinating. Joyce

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2001-05-14 11:55 PM

*sigh*

This is wonderfully written Chris. You know I love your prose, but darn! Your poetry is so good too!!! I feel as thought Kelly-Mae is a part of all of us...that's why it speaks to us so.

Irie
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since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

4 posted 2001-05-15 02:25 AM

Hey Chris,
I have to agree with Sharon. Not only do I enjoy your poetry,
I too believe that Kelly-Mae is in all of us in part.

quote:
stumbling to the valley,
choking on the dust of experience
she falls

A sudden and gripping ending. I love it!
Much enjoyed!

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2001-05-15 06:12 AM

"she stares at the ceiling
      and tries not to think.
- the pictures, though, are gone.
still, "

"so she cries at the water
        to step from the brink.
- but darkness shades the dawn.
still,"

Excellent Chris!  I love the way you've carried though the pattern and subtle rhyme scheme throughout, especially above ... it flowed beautifully. Very powerful and emotive sentiments, very nicely written indeed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

6 posted 2001-05-15 08:53 AM

This really makes one want to go out and help her back up, but by the time we've reached her, she's vanished...

well done Sir!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-05-15 05:42 PM

this is a plague???

Well ok. . . but it's one that I don't mind having. . .

I felt, like the others, that this character was (and is) a part of all of us. . . and you did a good job in showing her feelings of loss and darkness. . .

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