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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2001-05-14 11:53 AM

Under the rustle
of branches
where the stream pools
dip it's feathers
shuddering water
into jewels of light,
diamond dancers
reveal their pattern in absolute
brilliance after rain, and
the dark rises to place
kisses on dusk mountains
where the moon leaves it's traces,
natures whisper can be heard
in the shadows where
the river s l e e p s tonight

~*~ picture from All Posters~*~

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Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-14-2001).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-05-14 12:03 PM

I liked this...had a "chanting" quality to it...very peaceful and lulling somehow...nice job!

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

2 posted 2001-05-14 12:11 PM

WOW!

Regards,
Sudhir

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

3 posted 2001-05-14 12:26 PM

Wow, fantastic job, You managed to get a lovely peaceful enchanting feel into this poem . I also like the picture very much, the contrasting colours helps express the points you make in your poem .
I realy enjoyed reading it, many thanks .
L.of.L. Tommy .
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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2001-05-14 01:00 PM

Enchanting LC, beautiful. Your words, always so beautiful my friend. HUGS

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

5 posted 2001-05-14 01:38 PM

a most gratifying poem, and one I truely like.......

Michael

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-05-14 02:07 PM

into jewels of light,
diamond dancers
reveal their pattern in absolute
brilliance after rain, and
the dark rises to place
kisses on dusk mountains
where the moon leaves it's traces,
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stunning, enchanting, poetry in motion L,
the picture pales next to the words.
beautiful imagery and essence.
serenity defined

Did you make it to the Milky Way,
see the lights faded
that heaven is overrated
Did you fall for a shooting star
One without a permanent scar

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

7 posted 2001-05-14 03:22 PM

Excellent writing. This gives such a gentle and serene feeling.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2001-05-14 04:57 PM

Thanks for the kind and thoughtful replies....I love to go by the river and sit and think.....to hear the river at night is so peaceful.....be well everyone and hugs to you all.....

Lauren~

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Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-05-14 06:31 PM

I like to do that too Lauren. . . in fact, I do it a lot these days. . .

thanks for sharing with us. . .

This is wonderful. . .

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Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

10 posted 2001-05-14 08:09 PM

Lauren,

This has such a lovely and peaceful feel, my friend. I think I love it.

Thanks!

(((hugs)))
Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

11 posted 2001-05-14 08:26 PM

Greenyeye's, love these images. You write as a painter and this canvous is lovely.

Parker

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

12 posted 2001-05-14 09:24 PM

GreenEyes~
Such serene imagery ... gently flowing ~
You've got 'magic' ink in your pen.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

13 posted 2001-05-15 11:14 AM

enjoy

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

14 posted 2001-05-15 04:05 PM

GREENEYES........A very nice read

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