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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"This is my house," he shouts. "THIS is MY house!!" "Do you hear what I say?" "Here, what I say goes. I work hard all day, HERE you do what I want, here in MY house ... we do it MY way." But what the hell does that really mean? (and one would think) ... in "your house" you could be heard ... without having to scream? What is a house after all? A roof, four walls, dressed up-- in paint, brick, or stone. Some place that you can call your own? A place where you can sit upon your throne? (This place) where you will end up alone? When does house and prison become one in the same? When you paint the walls with anger, when you hang heavy drapes of shame. But go ahead ... shout your name ... place the blame ... stake your claim. Guard it like a dog with a bone, maybe its all you've ever known, not all the mistakes are yours alone. But in your one sided demand of atone, you cant see ... this caged bird has flown. Yes ... it is indeed "your" house ... but it wont ever ... be a home. Janet Marie *written for a friend* Did you make it to the Milky Way, see the lights faded that heaven is overrated Did you fall for a shooting star One without a permanent scar [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-14-2001).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
JM this is utterly wonderful, you have the ability to write the truth, and in a way that is clear and perfect. Thank you for this JM, I'm sure that your friend will gather strength from this wonderful piece. Take care Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"When does house and prison become one in the same? When you paint the walls with anger, when you hang heavy drapes of shame." Powerful, powerful emotions simply rip through this verse JM ... an amazing capture of a life too often lived by many. A very intense read from you today ... such a compelling read, very well done. I hope your friend will benefit from your thoughts, excellent writing indeed Janet Marie!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--very intense, this trajedy of brick, cement and wood, well done and so sad...and makes me glad for the knowledge that home is in the heart. Hugs! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my....almost don't know what to say. Been there, screamed that. But I LOVED this: (and one would think) ... in "your house" you could be heard ... without having to scream? Yer beautiful when yer right, yanno that? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is very captivating and powerful with so much truth in every line A truly sad story, but it is so real to life. A house is only a house This is a woderfully written piece that pierces the heart Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, until the heart hears, a house will never be but four walls... VERY well done, little one.... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This spoke to me on so many levels. This was MY poem just before my divorce. Possessions - like a house, mean so little when there is no emotion left to make it a home. Wonderfully done JM. Thank you. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JM, For so many a house is never a home.....this leaves me speechless and somewhat sad that people can treat each other with no respect....with no love....just the sense of some kind of evil power that has no right to bare....nicely done my friend....Peace and hugs to you.... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
very strong and effective, Janet Marie, very good.......writing.. Kathleen Blake |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Good, good, good. Though I never experienced it myself, I've close friends who have and it is not a pleasant sight when a home has no heart. Titia |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Hey, JM...very strong write on such a heartbreaking subject...but I wouldn't expect anything less from your pen, m'friend...great poem! sp  to be with you... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'm sorry, JM. It's those spam sandwiches that make me sit on the throne so much  |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is VERY good and soooo creative. Sauni Sauni :) |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet, where does that all consuming love go? All you "in love" people out there, try to remember this wonderful feeling may leave or change. Will you be ready to have these words bounce off the walls of a house that used to be a home? You said it well, dear girl, and I hope things get better for that friend. Hugs, ME |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent write, Marge, a very good read! ~Tier |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I wish this wasn't such an accurate depiction of so many lives... No matter how sturdy the house's foundation, when enough dreams are broken, the home shatters and nothing is left but the shouting. Very powerful write, JM... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Thank goodness, I don't live in that house anymore.....I hope your friend is ok. This is very powerful Janet....made me remember painful things.... SEA |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
JM-I felt this house, very poignant, splendid write. Hugs to your friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you all for your kind words and encouragement... I grew up in a house like this... for those who relate to this I sympathize, when control and possessivess override respect and patience a house can seem like a prison. Thank you always for the constant support of my work that you all share with me. love to poetry land. jm Did you make it to the Milky Way, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Janet, a house is never a home unless love is in it. You write of this painful mishap in life all to well. Hugs and peace sweet lady. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet the last two lines speak volumes...James |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
You know Janet, if you lived in a glass house I would walk by every nite. Parker |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! very inrense, very powerful. I loved it! excellent Janet! Maree |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You have pulled the rope of bells of sorrow And and in them rings the sounds of tomorrow. The message caused poor Randy to cry And surely brought a tear to my eye. Please fly to me my tinker bell And I will make you happy and well. Love Stinky |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Extremely well written work, this one... Janet, my friend... Many regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
GS, SBJ , P-man, DA, Sy-babes, and Sudhir, thank you all for theses wonderful and sweet replies, and for the constant support.... [email protected] putting those pedestals in the windows now Sweet Stinky ... Tell Randy not to cry and Im on the fly meet me on the dark side of the moon *L* tis never easy being a moth, |
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