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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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How quickly dissolved all promise of light The blackness descends. In the depths of the night A cry for lost dreams is torn from my throat. With indelible ink, on my heart you wrote And then just walked away. Offers joyously accepted were never meant But for one shining moment, you were heaven sent. Foolish creature I am, in love and not needed Yet taunted with warnings I should have heeded To avoid all this dismay. I'm lost in a quagmire not entered by choice And find myself silenced, lacking a voice But to scream in vain at the heavens above For the unfairness I'll never know love. To not wake again, I pray. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
nothing is hopeless and yuh deep down gotta know it yuh. this poem rocks searching searching deep i Love it |
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Tessa Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 67Ohio |
Very painful. You portray your emotions quite well. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This is very haunting, lady....truly a melancholy write.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
nothing is so hopeless. . . this I know. . . keep looking. . . the way is coming. . . excellent writing my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ah dear Lady Suthern... I hope this is no more than good writing, otherwise I'll have to kick that Toe in the backside for his afront. I bow to you and your's. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Foolish creature I am, in love and not needed an awful feeling....expressed well ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I always hope the one I am with right now will be the one and the search will be over...still the realization creeps in that it takes two of like heart and spirit...and they are not always so willing as I...but I do have hope that someday one will be just as desirous...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A cry for lost dreams is torn from my throat. With indelible ink, on my heart you wrote And then just walked away. Offers joyously accepted were never meant But for one shining moment, you were heaven sent. Foolish creature I am, in love and not needed Yet taunted with warnings I should have heeded To avoid all this dismay. =========================== never say never Ruthie-girl... but I understand the way our minds work when we're hurting ... and only you could say it in such a bleeding aching cadence kissed way. hard to critique such an emotive piece... but the rhyme scheme is way cool. heartstring playing render me girlie... wish we didnt know the words to the song so well. hugs RG me |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
So sad and painful is this poem. Please know that there is always hope...always. I know, because I've been there too many times. My best to you. Michael Proust- |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Very nicely written, suthern...but, don't ever give up on love, as distant as it may be now...very cliche of me, I know, but I know it's true. Without it, and I don't just mean the love of a man and woman, I mean, just general love...where can we say we'd be?? Again, nicely written, m'friend... sp  to be with you... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This tugs my heart strings Suthern, and I most definately am relating to this right now....but I refuse.......I will not give in.....for LOVE has the power, yep. Very deep..this one dear lady. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
There is POWER in love--- you expressed your feelings in the weaving of your poem. Having been there myself - I concur with Gentle Spirit. LP For those who believed in me - |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You knew I'd search for your name here didn't you. You write MY heart Ruth. Please know that you are NOT alone in this feeling. There are times when I want to shout it out loud, but others would be hurt and I am too afraid of rejection...... Let's go cry in our beer (root beer for me).....we'll get silly and sit on a bench in the park and watch the squirrels play with their nuts.  LOL |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
suthern girl....any time you feel the darkness descending, call me.....I have candles  a heart like yours is much too beautiful to go without love.....it will come  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"Foolish creature I am, in love and not needed" I echo Nakedthoughts, an awful feeling indeed. Though sad and painful, it is not hopeless. Hugs Maree |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sweet Suthern... it will come to you, and if Balladeer has candels....*sigh* let him light the way Hugs to you SEA |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Dear Suthern, in my country we have a saying: 'Behind dark clouds, the sun is always shining' It's true, dark clouds will not stay forever and I'm sure your sun will shine again for you. And while waiting, know you'll have many friends who love you. Titia |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
May the light of love shine upon you soon. This was a very well done couplet sonnet, and however sad it was, your poetry shows a definite love of the written word. Thank you for the grace of a great poem. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ruth, Your poem is very moving and very well written. The rhyming was excellent. Such a beautiful spirit will stand on its own with or without promises. I hope you look deep into the mirror of your essence and see what wonderful gifts you have to give. A lost dream has it's place, but does not occupy the whole. Your well of life runs very deep. There is so much more for you. Take care Love and hugs Liz |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
There is such depth within these lines Suthern, powerful emotion, with such delicate sadness woven throughout in this beautifully rhythmic piece. Wonderful writing that touched me deeply ... Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ Such an emotive outpouring of the heart. 'But for one shining moment, you were heaven sent.' Keep the light burning, sweetie~ Someone deserving will find the way~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
wayoutwalt: Thank you for loving it... and for saying it rocks! *G* Tessa: Thank you very much... I appreciate your comments! Decaflame: Thank you so much for reading! *S* Sven: Are you sure that's not a TRAIN coming? LOL Thank you very much! Andrew: If it's good writing, that's enough. *S* Thank you, gallant sir! nakdthoughts: Awful indeed... sucks your soul dry, doesn't it? *S* Thank you! JamesMichael: I sincerely wish you the best of luck! *S* Janet Marie: But... but... but... I don't think my mind DOES work! *G* And that dern song has so many repeating verses it's hard NOT to learn... however much we hate singing it. *S* Thank you... I'm glad you like the rhyme scheme. *S* Auguste: Thank you... your best is a treasure. *S* snowpants: I think it gave up on me... or hurled me into the trash. *S* Thank you so much... a "nicely written" from you is greatly appreciated! *S* Gentle Spirit: I'm so sorry you're relating... I wouldn't wish empathy on anyone. Thank you for reading! latin passions: Thank you for reading... your response is appreciated. *S* PDV: You are so very kind... and so dear. *S* I would so love to accept your invitation... maybe some day! *S* (Does tear drenched root beer taste better than salty iced tea? *G* I could switch! LOL) Balladeer: You're a sweetheart, Deer One. *S* Do you furnish matches, too? *G* Thank you, dear friend. Dark Angel: Maybe not the first time it happens... *S* Thank you very much for reading. SEA: If Bal lights a candle, I'll be crushed by the stampede of women wanting to have a candlelight dinner with him! LOL. Titia: What lovely thoughts... thank you so much for sharing them! *S* Mysteria: I don't think I could ask for a greater compliment than "your poetry shows a definite love of the written word." I'm grateful that's one love that's accepted. *S* Thank you so much! Elizabeth: I'm never sure of my rhymes when they don't seem to fit the norm... thank you so much for that excellent! *S* And to see your sun shining is so very satisfying... love and hugs back to you! *S* Kit: Dear lady, your wonderful comments humble me and give me great delight. *S* Thank you so very much!!! Marge: It doesn't help for them to find the way if they then find me undeserving. *S* Thank you... and hugs back to you! *S* I apologize for taking so long to respond to your kind comments... I can't post from my home dinosaur and the library lost internet access this weekend... but I was reading and savoring your words... thank you! *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 05-14-2001).] |
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