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Open Poetry #13

In a Daze

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-05-11 10:19 AM

Day after day, night after night, falling into the void
Somewhere between living and dying
A decision, a thought, somehow I had toyed
With a choice of laughing or crying

My ideas somehow divide me and are flawed
And I have to somehow endure
Being ripped apart and beaten raw
Leaving me broken and impure

My feelings are inconsequential and betray
And are good for nothing
But only to get in the way
Yet at least I am something

Sometimes I feel the need to lose my mind
When I’ve lost that need I’ve lost it all
And I know it’s just a matter of time
So I delay, hoping to stall

But the thing that kills me most
Is the reality slowly setting in
That who I once was is now a ghost
Playing a game with no chance to win

Just A Woman
Senior Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

1 posted 2001-05-11 10:21 AM

A powerful ending, my friend. Excellent!

"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2001-05-11 10:23 AM

Yes....the ending ties it up very well. I enjoyed this VERY much!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2001-05-11 10:43 AM

My ideas ... divide me

know that feeling..they both divide and overwhelm me..

*who I once was is now a ghost...Felt like this many times, too

~softsmiles

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-05-11 11:10 AM

"Sometimes I feel the need to lose my mind"

yes, me too.....for many reasons....wow this is so great!

SEA

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