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In a Daze
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In a Daze |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Day after day, night after night, falling into the void Somewhere between living and dying A decision, a thought, somehow I had toyed With a choice of laughing or crying My ideas somehow divide me and are flawed And I have to somehow endure Being ripped apart and beaten raw Leaving me broken and impure My feelings are inconsequential and betray And are good for nothing But only to get in the way Yet at least I am something Sometimes I feel the need to lose my mind When I’ve lost that need I’ve lost it all And I know it’s just a matter of time So I delay, hoping to stall But the thing that kills me most Is the reality slowly setting in That who I once was is now a ghost Playing a game with no chance to win |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
A powerful ending, my friend. Excellent!
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Yes....the ending ties it up very well. I enjoyed this VERY much! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
My ideas ... divide me know that feeling..they both divide and overwhelm me.. *who I once was is now a ghost...Felt like this many times, too ~softsmiles ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Sometimes I feel the need to lose my mind" yes, me too.....for many reasons....wow this is so great!  SEA |
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