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Of a Fallen Butterfly
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Of a Fallen Butterfly |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Of A Fallen Butterfly How pale and sad by comparison Is the lost beauty of the red, red rose? Next to the glorious wonder of the butterfly Of Its magic metamorphosis that leaves us in awe Her colours exquisite as a haunting sunset Her flutter the envy of all winged in a fauna Flawless and perfect to those who seek her For she is the chosen one The only living soul of God’s creatures Getting that ever wanted second chance Sins of one hardly noticed, but what of these? With wings, unrecognizable and all forgiven I have been witness to the preposterous Yet, with mine own eyes I will declare it Think me laughable if you will Perhaps even declare my sanity questionable That once, not so long ago I was a spectator to this amazing event Only it was magnificently vice versa As incredibly odd as it sounds, I will swear it She flickered and flirted for all to view So jolly in her joy for the others jealousy And I watched her with narrow eyes For she committed a great sin, and it was vanity Why would one whose slate once wiped so clean Be so foolish to trite with Mother Nature? Could it have been too much conceitedness or pride? Her excessive belief that interfered with the grace of God For whatever the reason may be She withered away over time and I couldn’t help but watch First the distorting of her precious gloss And then her wings did begin to fray For the entire world to see, she was transformed So what became of her and where is she now? Alone, clinging to a collapsing branch And yet, through all that has happened It is her ignorance or should I say vanity? That keeps her an ugly creepy crawly Marina May 10/2001 It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
An excellent showing of different images here Marina. The comparison is wonderful. You've done well with this one. I've missed reading your work here. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now I KNOW we're not talking about any butterflies I KNOW!!!   But this is an unusual perspective, I like the phrasing of your thoughts here, Marina, very visual and reminded me of finding a dried butterfly wing---I HATE when that happens. Great work!!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, I don't know about your lost version of this same poem...but this was totally amazing. A total visual journey with this piece. Great read. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
 Beautiful!!! Kathleen Blake |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Passions Voice, thank you for such a lovely compliment. Serenity, was I just THAT obvious?? James, thank you. But I like I told you, I really much preferred the original. I was very upset when I lost it. I'm glad that you liked this version anyway. Kathleen, thank you so much. I love the picture! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice poem Marina....James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Marina this is AWESOME... damn girl when your muse comes back she makes a hell of an entrance!! excellent employ of imagery,vocabulary, metaphor,poetic comparisons. I love the way you wrote this with an edge of "in your face" impact!! This is very cool..and one of your best... well done poetess girlie  "Nature's first green is gold, |
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Martinque Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 69 |
Found this one way down ...so back to the top. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James, thank you. I always love your replyies. Jan, Are you trying to make my head swell or what! Thank you so much for such an overwhelming amount of compliments.  Martinque, thank you for dragging it from the basement! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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