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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2001-05-10 08:27 AM

I swallowed my pride
with a heave of my chest
as I breathed in deep
and let out a sigh
while my shadow stood
on his tail and laughed wickedly
prejudiced at my predicament
of projections on the mental plane.

Is there a lesson to be learnt,
something to be grasped,
from the derisive echoes
that my shadow evoked
or should I just let him remain
amidst his howling madcap laughs
ignoring the thorn-like stabs
at the state of my abused mind?

All this time, obtuse angled thoughts
curve into my mind in a confused way
like suggestively pirated lunacy
blowing horns of loud genre
as if trying to force the traffic
inside the brain to clear and give way
as I open a book of logical reasoning
to make sense out of fuzzy decision trees.

My brain is as busy as a bee
ever buzzing with wild thoughts
each coloured in a different shade
each figured in a different shape
maybe I should use my thoughts
and earn the proverbial fast-buck
or maybe I should preserve them
and age them like wine!

And my crawling follower
reared his head out once again
and barked questions like a drill
why let heavy thoughts govern
your pleasant and simple life
why commit harakiri
when you can do without
can't you be content in just being?

I am in search of a convincing reply.

Till then,
thoughts are being etched,
criss-crossedly sketched unevenly
like violent brushstrokes of a painter!

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JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-05-10 08:32 AM

Can't you be content in just being...exactly my thought, of late. I was meant to read this, thank you!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-10 09:11 AM

Is there a lesson to be learnt,
something to be grasped,
from the derisive echoes
that my shadow evoked
or should I just let him remain
amidst his howling madcap laughs
ignoring the thorn-like stabs
at the state of my abused mind?

All this time, obtuse angled thoughts
curve into my mind in a confused way
like suggestively pirated lunacy
=========================

when you can do without
can't you be content in just being?

I am in search of a convincing reply.

Till then,
thoughts are being etched,
criss-crossedly sketched unevenly
like violent brushstrokes of a painter!
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Sud, this is DEEP ...
powerful images accompany your intensity of expression..
many things to ponder here...
and if ya ever learn the secret to content...
let me know...
I too am still waiting for that "convincing reply"

very cool write my friend
well done poet sir

"Nature's first green is gold,
Her hardest hue to hold." ...
"So dawn goes down to day,
Nothing gold can stay."
~Frost~

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

3 posted 2001-05-10 02:28 PM

Well, if we were content with just being we wouldn't be poets.
And you Sir are a Poet.

Don't ya just hate those eve's dropping busy body shadows. I usually just curse at them and say shut up flat boy or i'll shine a light on ya.

Ok so I'm losing it.

Parker

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

4 posted 2001-05-10 02:34 PM

Sudhir, Very lovely, thought provoking.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2001-05-10 02:39 PM

Pray tell, what is contentment? I thought I'd found the stuff once... but it was only an illusion. *S*

This is wonderful, Sudhir... very intense and gripping!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-05-10 03:38 PM

There's a lot going on with this piece, Sudhir, some really rich thoughts here.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

7 posted 2001-05-10 08:40 PM

another gem sudhir... well done

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-05-10 09:01 PM

superb my friend. . .

full of wonderful thoughts. . . you reach very deep with this one. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

9 posted 2001-05-11 04:29 AM

JLR, thanks a lot for coming by

Janet, my friend, your words really mean a lot… thank you

Parker, this is high praise … thanks for the compliments and for stopping by

Gemini, Thank you

Suthern, there lies some truth in many an illusion… thank you

Kathleen, Thanks for finding the rich ones…

Jamie, you my friend, are a gem… thanks

Sir Sven, thank you so much

Regards to all,
Sudhir

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