some people might think this is a little risque

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samantha4
Junior Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 32
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2001-05-09 07:33 PM

only yes.
(there’s only yes)

yes is the moon which d r i p s upon             (you(upon me)          and (me(upon you).
and tonight.

yes are(sweet honey drenched kiss me)your lips.
yes is your touch.
you are(everything i need i want within me)yes.

yes is the sweet(taste of you)
        that burns on my tongue(your tongue)
and pushes(push harder)my blood
and wets my skin(you wet my skin with you my love)
        i am(yours you are mine)yes.

yes is a rushing(pushing feeling flattening)wind that fills my lungs

and stammers(      i      love     you      )my breath

only now
only here
only yes.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-05-09 07:36 PM

I like the feel of this one. . . and the way that you've formed (this one) with the words. . .

if you have more like this, perhaps you should think about posting in our Adult forum. . . we like writing like this in there. . .

welcome. . .

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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-05-09 08:31 PM

I enjoyed but had trouble following the words the way you had them....

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

3 posted 2001-05-09 08:40 PM

Sensual, sexy, made me put the air on, well done!

samantha4
Junior Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 32
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2001-05-09 09:53 PM

Sven...thank you.  I don't happen to have too many others like this, but I appreciate your suggestion. I was afraid it might be a little too risque for the Open Poetry forum, but I gave it a go anyway.

Irish Rose...I'm glad you enjoyed it, if even a little.  My favorite poet happens to be ee cummings, and my syntax is often inspired by him, even without me noticing. =)

walker....thank you. =)

i thank you God for most this amazing day;for the leaping greenly spirits of trees and a blue true dream of sky - ee cummings

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

5 posted 2001-05-10 09:17 AM

mmmm...for the second time tonight I seem to have lost a reply! Such is life!

Sometimes there is only yes.I too found the format difficult at first but on re reading it seemed to be ok. Welcome!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown

Cuddlez
Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362

6 posted 2001-05-10 11:25 AM

oh gosh!
i for one loved the way the words were phrased
a refreshing change!

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

samantha4
Junior Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 32
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2001-05-10 11:38 AM

EagleOne - thank you, I'm very happy to be a part of this poetry board with many talented writers!

Cuddlez...your "oh gosh" made me smile...thank you!

i thank you God for most this amazing day;for the leaping greenly spirits of trees and a blue true dream of sky - ee cummings

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