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WhiteOnyx
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0 posted 2001-05-07 05:33 AM


Hi there  

I thought I'd put this one up to see what you think  

Forever

I’m everything in life that you don’t see.
I was just a fleeting dream
I was a thread within the cloth
The trickling of the stream.

I never looked you in the eye,
You never saw my face.
Even if you looked for me
You wouldn’t find a trace,

For I am all around you now:
Everyone, and everything.
I am the wind that moves your hair,
The tiny birds that sing.

I’m the grass on which you walk
The brook in which you wade;
I am the busy city streets,
The lonely everglade

The willows weeping all their tears
For things I’ll never see.
Memories turned to ashes,
Dreams of things I’ll never be…

If wings of gold were on my shoulders,
And diamonds in my hair,
If I came down to visit you
Would you still be there?

Would you look into my eyes,
And see into my soul?
Could I look at you and think
‘You would make me whole’?

All these questions that I ask,
Replies I’ll never see.
But do not think that what you did
Never meant a thing to me.

For all I am is what you saw
And I am that still,
For our lives may not go on….
But our hearts forever will.

"The soul would have no rainbow had the eyes no tears."

© Copyright 2001 WhiteOnyx - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-05-07 06:53 AM


WhiteOnyx~
Welcome to Passions !

This piece contains some lovely, stirring tender thoughts.

'For I am all around you now:
Everyone, and everything.
I am the wind that moves your hair,
The tiny birds that sing.'


BEAUTIFUL !
~*Marge*~

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VAS
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2 posted 2001-05-07 09:30 AM


Welcome!!!Such a lovely piece with which to introduce yourself.  It's tender and filled with an eternal promise.  I like the images that stir all the senses.
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3 posted 2001-05-07 09:37 AM


Very nice indeed , What a pleasure to read
Welcome to passions   looking forward to reading more of your work  

Charisma
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4 posted 2001-05-07 09:50 AM


Welcome to passions, and you make a very nice entrance with this beauty.
looking forwards for more.

Charisma

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5 posted 2001-05-07 10:30 AM


Welcome to Passions.  Please favor us with more of your work.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Tiersdin
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6 posted 2001-05-07 10:57 AM


W*E*L*C*O*M*E to passions!

I agree with all the above comments...

looking forward to reading more

~Tier

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7 posted 2001-05-07 08:14 PM


Welcome to the family. I too look forward to reading more from you!    

Please check your email.

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8 posted 2001-05-07 09:01 PM


Excellently descriptive write!  Welcome to Passions...I look forward to more of your work, too!  

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

WhiteOnyx
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9 posted 2001-05-08 12:46 PM


Thanks everybody **Warm Fuzzies All Around**

"The soul would have no rainbow had the eyes no tears."

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