The Earth Moved--not what you might think

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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-05-05 12:32 PM

The Earth Moved
Virginia Salter

Well, it must’ve
cuz old yellow sun
commenced to settin’
way north in the sky.

Touchin’ edges
of them there clouds
all filled up with deep, dark gray
Yeah, touchin’ them edges
with glints of gold
and firin’ that gray up
with bits of crimson
puttin’ rose on them cheeks

‘N’ just a gentle puff of blue
cerulean trimmed in navy
surroundin’ those bits of fluff
hangin’ there
colorin’ in their weak attempt
to block ol’ Sol’s light

But-cha’ know
ol’ Sol’s sleepy
he jus’ sinks down
past the ebony rim of earth
pullin’ that land
right on up
over its head
an’ with a big ol’ gapin’ yawn’
o’ sunset colors
it says g’night to all
reaches up
turns off the light
leavin’ jus’ a tender glow
in its wake
that ol’ moon grabs it
an’ gets jus’ enough
for a night-light
to stay the fright
of blackness.

©May 4, 2001

[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 05-07-2001).]

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

1 posted 2001-05-05 01:15 AM

I'll be a thankin' on dem ol' gilt edgerd clouwds way diffrn't now!
Fun read VAS!

Krawdad
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Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-05-05 01:30 AM

Wonderfully done. Joyce

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

3 posted 2001-05-05 02:59 PM

The whole piece is wonderful - but most of all I loved this imagery:
"ol’ Sol’s sleepy
he jus’ sinks down
past the ebony rim of earth
pullin’ that land
right on up
over its head
an’ with a big ol’ gapin’ yawn’
o’ sunset colors
it says g’night to all
reaches up
turns off the light
leavin’ jus’ a tender glow
in its wake"

Of course I could not conclude without remarking - the title - made me read - and my expectation was much different -~grin~
Suffice to say I was NOT disappointed ~smile~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-05-05 03:19 PM

Thank you all, and Wilfred, I'm positive I know what you mean. I was afraid that possibly that title might keep people away, but then, wait, that's silly, cuz I see bigger numbers of comments after titles that are less subtle in their hint of what's inside being related to 'other kinds of earth movements.' ;O}

You have chosen to enjoy the same section that I enjoy most, too. I'm thrilled and encouraged. Thank you so much for your definitive comment.

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-05-07 10:02 AM

Virginia....Glad I didn't miss this. "..to stay the fright of blackness..." Wish I'd written that. Bob

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-05-07 10:51 AM

Thanks, Bob, it was a fun one to write. Glad you liked that particular phrase. Surely that's what the moonlight is for, for on a new moon, the blackness is powerful.

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