Open Poetry #13 |
Gray Sky Morning |
Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Please release me gray sky morning Oh how tight Your fingers clutch I fear no light To be forewarning Why do you mock me with your touch Leave me now to sunlight shinning Skies of blue So crystalline Help me through This mood confining Show me things I’ve never seen Please release me gray sky morning Clouds today I cannot take And if you may Be so adorning That I’ll smile when I wake [This message has been edited by Kevin (edited 05-03-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Kevin. I think you are truly a good poet. I like rhyme of course and you have it down pat, but you also make a lot of sense for someone so young. I realized that with the first poem I read from you. Keep up the good posts. Joyce |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Joyce I believe thats the best compliment Ive ever receieved here at passions I am in your debt |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Much better! Loved the original rhyme pattern! Thanks for telling me about this one, M |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kevin~ A remarkable piece from you. The lilting rhyme and cadence makes it a perfect read aloud piece. Oh ... this is really, really good ! GOOD poetry. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Thanks master, Told ya Margey ITS ALLL GOOD...hehe synonymous popular expressions ahh nevermind |
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