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EbbTide
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
 I seldom think of you today. Time was when you rushed into my life on crest tide boiling the waters of my soul. Nerve ends sent messages tingling along love’s line, leaving me overwhelmed, Now ocean’s roar has ceased. Ebb tide laps gently at the shore. Odd, that you could roil my heart so furiously, yet your departure leaves no wake. Graphics: Banzai Pipeline by Woody Woodworth< "I am not now that which I have been." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow, this is fantastic. It's amazing that it has turned out that way...maybe the roil was superficial, only physical and not tied to the emotions or the heart. The photo attached is a fine enhancement to this piece, Julian, I enjoyed the read. The sensations vividly described. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Julian...Simply wonderful....as well as wise. This deserves a chaper in everyone's guide to falling in and leaving behind love. Applause. Bob |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This reminded me of a wonderful song by the Righteous Brothers, I loved the song and enjoyed this very much. Kathleen Blake |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Julian~ I just love this ! 'Odd, that you could roil my heart so furiously, yet your departure leaves no wake.' Most enjoyable. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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confetti Junior Member
since 2001-04-12
Posts 33 |
What a contradiction you pose. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
It's always good to know how to let go. I like your use of imagery here. Of course, the ocean is my favorite place to be. Thanks for sharing this one. Michael Proust- |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Interesting metaphor... I can relate, would be surprised if it's me. But I leave not in haste to displease my love place. I leave our heavenly place, when body and mind can no longer fight... the sandman. My warm thank you for letting me attach my note to your poem.LP You're always with me, day and night. [This message has been edited by latin passion (edited 05-04-2001).] |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
VAS: thank you for your kind comment. I must admit to this being a figment of my imagination and not written about a real life situation. RMW: although not from my personal scrapbook, I fully agree with your wisdom of loving, yet detaching when appropriate. So many losses stay not only in the heart, but in the mind as well. Irish Rose: although I date myself terribly, I readily admit to enjoying the Righteous Brothers and that specific song. Marge: I'm pleased you enjoyed the twist at the end. confetti: thank for noticing the tension created within this snapshot. Michael: the ocean has a definite pull over my poetry, and write of it frequently. One of the benefits of living in the Pacific NW is the access to water. latin passion: thank you for attaching your note in the comments. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I loved the simplicity of this wonderful poem, how sometimes walking away can be very much like a wake.  Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautifully written... Regards to you, Sudhir |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Kate: I too enjoyed the simplicity of the poem and was surprised to find I penned something that actually made sense. lol. Sidhir: Thank you for coming by. Appreciate your comments. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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