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Master
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0 posted 2001-05-02 03:35 PM


The pencil still remains unsharpened.
May came unnoticed. In the yard,
The sprouts spread the verdant carpet
And all is stirring, but the heart.

There, on the grass, under the thickets,
Where you and I, once in the fall,
Hid from the rain, the restless crickets
Evoke your laughter in my soul.

I miss you dear, -- your lustful smile,
And that imprudent, heedless gaze
That draws one further into guile
And leaves unsatisfied and dazed.

How many winters passed us by,
When verses kept the fire burning?
You came one night to say “good-bye,”
And left me early in the morning.

Since then, I have not heard a word.
I’ve searched for you with no avail,
And by the icons prayed the Lord
When all the rest appeared to fail.

And now I hear the mellow songs
Of nightingales in the evening
And all this beauty just prolongs
The day of solitude and grieving.


© Copyright 2001 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
RMW
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1 posted 2001-05-02 03:37 PM


Very well done.  Bob
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2001-05-02 03:38 PM


Yes melancholy...James
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3 posted 2001-05-02 06:41 PM


superb Master. . . you've captured that feeling well here. . . the words convey it well. . . the memories, the loss. . .

excellent. . .

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4 posted 2001-05-02 06:43 PM


A lovely rhythm to this poem.  Joyce
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