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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2001-05-02 09:09 AM


Can’t stop the feelings
That come with a rush
Brightly colored memories
That cascade through a hazy brain
In moments that I cannot control,
Nor would I,
Even if I knew how

I need to slow down
Movements from day to day
I have lost my imagination,
My drive, the need to create;
That thing which makes us human

Where does my life go?
So young to be over so soon
I am not in control anymore
I am losing ground to chaos
Everything is spinning
And flying so fast
Nothing is clear
I’ve got to hold on
To something steady in my life
But sadly, there is nothing

© Copyright 2001 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
Just A Woman
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1 posted 2001-05-02 09:19 AM


Good morning, PK.   I know this feeling well.  When life and all the chaos it entails overflow my borders, I go to the woods, the fields, somewhere quiet in nature, to get back to the center of me.  And so I would suggest, if you asked, which you certainly haven't, going to visit those gators.  
Take care of you.

Kellie


"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

Tiersdin
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2 posted 2001-05-02 09:42 AM


Enjoyed the poem, Poetic Knight, & understand the feelings. I think Miss Kellie offered some pretty good advice! Hang in there!

*smiles*

~Tier

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3 posted 2001-05-02 09:45 AM


quote:
Everything is spinning
And flying so fast
Nothing is clear
I’ve got to hold on



who's been looking in my window and describing my life....

well done, Sir!

PoeticKnight
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4 posted 2001-05-02 10:07 AM


Thank you all, but everything is ok. My darker stuff comes from deep, deep down in the subconscious, and is just stories, thats all.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 2001-05-02 10:22 AM


Can’t stop the feelings
That come with a rush
Brightly colored memories
That cascade through a hazy brain
In moments that I cannot control,
Nor would I,
Even if I knew how
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and so few do ..."deep deep down" as well as you.  

Cerenity
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6 posted 2001-05-02 10:36 AM


Hi PoeticKnight,

You described those feelings and what happens when all seems out of control so very well, I really enjoyed this one thank you.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



PoeticKnight
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7 posted 2001-05-02 11:03 AM


Thank you!
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8 posted 2001-05-02 01:46 PM


yet another "wow"  this is amazing  
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9 posted 2001-05-02 06:48 PM


words for us all PK. . .

wonderful. . .

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walker
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10 posted 2001-05-02 08:54 PM


Great poem.
JLR
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11 posted 2001-05-02 09:11 PM


I'm glad it's 'just stories'...wonderful write!  I have been there many times.
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