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Masked Intruder
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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2001-04-30 05:19 PM


Sunlight seems to slowly drip away
In a meadow far from over the hill.
She dances in the last red rays
That push through a cream-clouded sky,
Hems twirling in slowmotion circles,
Hands intwined in their own little balet.
And as the fickle rain falls
The light in her eyes doesn't fade,
But somehow grows brighter
With each dramatic raindrop that splashes
Casually on her upturned face.

© Copyright 2001 Philip Zemler - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-30 05:21 PM


Very poetic..LP
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2 posted 2001-04-30 05:25 PM


Hey you....I love the portraiture of this piece....fantastic...ABSOLUTELY!!!!  

luv to you, sweet'ums!!!!

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3 posted 2001-04-30 05:29 PM


MI...it's been awhile....this is good, I like the imagery!
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4 posted 2001-04-30 08:03 PM


OMG!!     Masked One, THIS is excellent! The image I got was wonderful. It is a treat to read your work again, Sweets.   I hope you're well. Ohh..and a late thank you for replying to mine recently.  
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5 posted 2001-05-01 09:38 AM


lp and Sunshine--
Thanks much for reading, I'm glad you liked.

Temptress and Serenity--
Two of my favs, glad you caught me sneaking in here.

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6 posted 2001-05-02 01:50 PM


I should be doing my math assignment due today.  But I guess I don't really want to end up next to some gross smelling guy at rockfest.  Jerk.  So, yeah, here I am.  I like the images.  Nice job.


Ryan

"ah, little girls make shadows on the sidewalk shorter than the shadow of death in this town--" - Jack Kerouac

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7 posted 2001-05-02 08:33 PM



  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

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