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Amuse_mi
Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

0 posted 2001-04-29 01:00 AM

Impending doom
The time had come
Swallowing fear
Held out his hand
She pursed her lips
He knew she would
And tensely reached
To touch him.

He pulled her close
Hand at her back
She lifted her arm
To drape his neck
The teardrop fell
And stained his shirt
He held her quiet
With feather grip.

He felt her shake
And closed his eyes
While she tapped her teeth
They both knew why
He never said
Just held her there
His shirt was drenched
He didn't care.

To touch
To feel
So long
In need
He came
And held her
In time
To breathe.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

1 posted 2001-04-29 01:06 AM

Wow this is wonderful , it gave me goose bumbs reading it, so very well written

thank you for sharing

latin passion
Senior Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

2 posted 2001-04-29 01:17 AM

sigh, I visualized your poem. Sigh...
LP

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-04-29 07:15 AM

There's a lot of feeling in this one...

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2001-04-29 07:35 AM

Wonderful emotions in this piece Amuse-mi ... sometimes we just need that someone to hold us ... nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2001-04-29 09:20 AM

Amuse_mi - such tender words you write. My hand is extended, may I have this dance?

BC

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

6 posted 2001-04-29 10:26 AM

Very emotional and touching words. Nicely done.

Ariana

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

7 posted 2001-04-29 11:02 AM

The telepathy between two people in love, when words are not needed because there is a much deeper communication, portrayed wonderfully in your words. I enjoyed this very much.

Regards,
Olias.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2001-04-29 11:29 AM

AmuseMi~
Very tenderly done.

'He held her quiet
With feather grip'

LOVELY thought.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Amuse_mi
Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

9 posted 2001-04-29 12:47 PM

Whisky-you're welcome!

LP-Thanks!

Kit-I agree.

BC-You ARE a perpetual flirt!!!!!

Ariana-Thankyou, too!

Olias-Yes, that telepathy thing....

Marge-

thanks.

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