Open Poetry #13 |
First Dance |
Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
Impending doom The time had come Swallowing fear Held out his hand She pursed her lips He knew she would And tensely reached To touch him. He pulled her close Hand at her back She lifted her arm To drape his neck The teardrop fell And stained his shirt He held her quiet With feather grip. He felt her shake And closed his eyes While she tapped her teeth They both knew why He never said Just held her there His shirt was drenched He didn't care. To touch To feel So long In need He came And held her In time To breathe. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wow this is wonderful , it gave me goose bumbs reading it, so very well written thank you for sharing |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
sigh, I visualized your poem. Sigh... LP |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There's a lot of feeling in this one... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful emotions in this piece Amuse-mi ... sometimes we just need that someone to hold us ... nicely done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Amuse_mi - such tender words you write. My hand is extended, may I have this dance? BC |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Very emotional and touching words. Nicely done. Ariana |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
The telepathy between two people in love, when words are not needed because there is a much deeper communication, portrayed wonderfully in your words. I enjoyed this very much. Regards, Olias. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AmuseMi~ Very tenderly done. 'He held her quiet With feather grip' LOVELY thought. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
Whisky-you're welcome! LP-Thanks! Kit-I agree. BC-You ARE a perpetual flirt!!!!! Ariana-Thankyou, too! Olias-Yes, that telepathy thing.... Marge- thanks. |
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