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Mysteria
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0 posted 2001-04-29 12:42 PM


~*Lightning*~


Deafening thunder
Pathos pure wash saline drops
Sky cracking its whip


Art: Lightning ~ A. Davies

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1 posted 2001-04-29 12:45 PM


What a powerful visual.  You always find the perfect picture to compliment your pieces.  I loved this.  


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2 posted 2001-04-29 01:04 AM


Amuse_me - he he - find the picture first, write second - I cheat!  Thank you.
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3 posted 2001-04-29 01:41 AM


WOW!!!!! glad I wasn't under that tree! LP
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4 posted 2001-04-29 03:11 AM


Cheater!  
I very much enjoyed this haiku, the last line especially.  Wonderful job!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
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5 posted 2001-04-29 05:00 AM


Latin passion: I am glad I was not under that tree too, thanks for reading.

Allan: I confess I do cheat that way, and glad you liked the last line I thought it portrayed the crack of lightning anyway.

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6 posted 2001-04-29 07:03 AM


finding pictures first, than the words, is NOT cheating...it's called ingenuity...

light'ning striking minds
shattering thoughts into shards
cleaving souls apart

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 04-29-2001).]

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7 posted 2001-04-29 08:54 AM


Excellent imagery in so few words Mysteria!  Wonderfully vivid!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-04-29 09:11 AM


*wow* powerful haiku....love it.

Charisma

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9 posted 2001-04-29 10:00 AM


Sunshine ~ Wow, that was a good one!  Pssst, glad I don't have to stay after class whew!

Kit ~ Thank you - less is more they say!

Charisma ~ And thank you too, I appreciate that you liked it.

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10 posted 2001-04-29 11:20 AM


Mysteria~
AWESOME !
What power in the lightning of your words.
They compliment the picture well.
I can see how that pic would inspire you.
AWESOME !
~*Marge*~

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11 posted 2001-04-29 11:46 AM


Wow!  Pathos pure...quite a powerful phrase within this fantastic piece!
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12 posted 2001-04-29 11:54 AM


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