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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I am a fool I know I am-- a hero's journey without plan and every time I take a step, I know I trek a path unchecked-- But still there is resounding hum mantra of this thing undone Aleph--Bayet- Life and Death continuum shallow-depth darkness--light, exhale, inhale, a glimpse in dark of fleshly pale the madness of a clock in tick- suspicion--there must be a trick-- I must not be the only one undone by time's cruel pendulum. May all my busy-ness of mind just like the clock, become unwind the circle of two hands in spill- within the center--time stands still. In the center, find the door. In nothingness you will find more. To find the treasure hid by hell, you must first trek path of self. As hands of clock encircling, you'll find yourself encompassing-- be wary of your hands want more... Within the center? Open door. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-26-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But still there is resounding hum mantra of this thing undone ======================= exhale, inhale, a glimpse in dark of fleshly pale the madness of a clock in tick- suspicion--there must be a trick-- I must not be the only one undone by time's cruel pendulum. ===================== the circle of two hands in spill- within the center--time stands still. In the center, find the door. In nothingness you will find more. To find the treasure hid by hell, you must first trek path of self. As hands of clock encircling, you'll find yourself encompassing-- be wary of your hands want more... Within the center? Open door. ===================== (only we can set ourself free??) this is so damn cool sen.... wisdom, spirituality, unrequited dreams, fate, destiny,... this is as cool a sen candle dance  this one goes in me twin collection awesome write me girlie will take many reads to see all of this ones many gifts wrapped in rhyme  meThough my soul may sit in darkness, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the madness of a clock in tick- love this line...this poem is soooo YOU..I really enjoyed it..by the way..pretty picture ..*s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I was enthralled from beginning to end, I relate on so many levels, what a passionate, mournful, insightful write!~ Take care, Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 04-27-2001).] |
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Coco Junior Member
since 2001-01-28
Posts 48 |
"In the center find the door" Serenity, sweetie I missed reading your poetry but I'm back now and here to stay and I wanna say this poem is absolutely great... Sometimes the steps we take in finding the center may take a lil time but once we're there we discover the door is ajar as we then proceed in strength of stride across the bridge of tomorrow's new paths... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
And if the door opens? Love this one serenity.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all---and Sharon? The thing is--the door is always open--locks are just the illusion! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
bravo!!!!!!!quote: geezharpo... you got the timin' goin' on girl!!! this one's right on time!!! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i forgot to say that an open Dor or a closed Dor is a major theme with me... hehe.... i try to keep mine closed tight as a drum but... lol... sometimes actual light slips in and the Dor opens up.... still gotta keep the weather stripping on though... y'know? there's a keyhole i sometimes put masking tape on, btw, just in case you need to explore that option... *grin |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey lucy! thanks....the "Aleph-Bayet" first two letters of the Hebrew alphabet...which according to a kabbalic tradition I once studied represented.. life/death....although the spelling of Bayet is up for grabs depending on whom you study---I KNEW you would ask!!!! Thanks, and love ya much! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"I am a fool I know I am-- a hero's journey without plan and every time I take a step, I know I trek a path unchecked--" Wow! Such wisdom from a coonass....hee hee...ya know I'm just funnin' don't ya??? Love the opening stanza...and that's not taking anything away from the rest of it. Great right...enjoy this a bunch. jwesley |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: why did these two lines stand out so...I don't know, but sometimes one shouldn't nudge the Muse... A good read, Serene one.... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
somehow those hebrew words reminded me of "the alpha and the omega, the beginning and the end"... i thought it was related... thanks!!! |
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