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Time In A Bottle
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Time In A Bottle |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Time in a bottle Adrift on an endless sea Sands of time denied |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
I do so enjoy Japanese short form. Thank you. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Such perfection of thought in this tiny work of art. Applause - Applause ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
A cliche', twisted fresh like lemonade. Nice goin', Paula. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Paula...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Reminded me of Jim Choche "Time in a bottle" enjoyed this format very much. Kathleen Blake |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This has given me a great idea! Thank you friend. Oh and by the way...Loved It! Where did I put that cork? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Julian...no thank you...I find this form so challenging...but lots of fun Marge...LOL well you are the one who encouraged me when I was just starting to learn this...hugs right back at ya Krawdad...Fresh squeezed lemonade Tart and tangy on your lips Natural pucker Thanks Kathleen...so glad you enjoyed it my fellow Phoenix James...hugs to you my sweetest friend JLR...OH NO!!!! An idea...look out world...hehehe let me know how it turns out ok? HUGS |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ this is wonderful...amazing how a small poem can bring to mind such grand visions  SEA |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
it's nice the way you made many thoughts came by saying just few words thanx WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
It's amazing how only 3 lines can touch a person and make them say wow!~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
For a minute I thought I'd come across Jim Croce's sister! But then I said that's my dear friend Paula and she's written a wonderful piece here. So much yearning and desire for the warmth of forever in this one. Written proof that we writers will dream and drift off into forever even after we pass on....on into the never ending stream of consciousness...the all knowing consciousness of infinite discovery! The consciousness that all the evolutionists can't explain! Where did that power of reasoning come from, the ability to plan and invent and conquer. The creative ability that lasts even though we can't comprehend anything without a beginning or an end..... Love to ya dear poet friend! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
cool o yuh |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Paula....isn't it fun when you leave behind smiles....? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
SEA...well sometimes I just cant find more than a few words...thanks sweet lady DreamLess...I like this form of writing...its a challenge...thank you Melissa...you flatter me...thank you ethome...your reply is poetry itself dear friend...and gives me many thoughts to ponder...I dont know whether to thank you...or smack you...so I guess I will just hug you instead...HUGS Walt...way cool...thanks Sunshine...I sure like to try |
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