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Alwye

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In the space between moments

0 posted 2001-04-22 09:46 PM

Candlelight... the rain...
And velvet draped stone
Weaves a subtle, warming ambiance
That spills forth (with a visible sheen)
Into my hollowed spaces--
The steady, trickling melody
Melding exquisitely
With the rhythm in my soul.

I stand exposed, staring from beyond
Softly illuminated walls...outward...
Through the windowpanes...upward...
To an amethystine tinted sky...
And I watch the clouds glide east
While the crystal cascade falls on.

Tiny raindrops cling to tree branches
Like translucent autumn berries
Dropping swiftly when the breath of Earth
Pushes nonchalantly through...
And each water-droplet kiss
Brings forth a new beginning to the land
And all who shares it’s wealth.

I realize now that I stand embraced,
Each tremble of the atmosphere
Caressing me...
Filling my hollowed spaces
With a subtle, warming ambiance
Created by candlelight...and rain.

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

Tessa
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1 posted 2001-04-22 09:48 PM

This is stunning! I applaud. You've woven this quite beautifully.

Acies

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Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-04-22 09:51 PM

I can't believe how good you are with words. It's totally amazing. I believe I haven't read much of your work, but right now I'm in awe. I'm glad I read this and thankful that you decided to share with us your talent. Thanks again

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 04-22-2001).]

Dusk Treader

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3 posted 2001-04-22 10:22 PM

As always your imagery and choice of words is incredible. Such a connectedness with the earth and the wonders of things like "translucent autumn berries." I loved the line "steady trickling melody." The idea of a grand harmony appeals to me.

"And every state of mind, left to itself, every shutting up of the creature within the dungeon of its own mind - is, in the end, Hell" - C.S. Lewis

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

4 posted 2001-04-22 10:32 PM

And each water-droplet kiss
Brings forth a new beginning to the land
And all who shares it’s wealth.

beautiful thoughts...*s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Balladeer

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5 posted 2001-04-23 12:06 PM

an amethystine tinted sky...

what a beautiful description, Krista. The entire poem is a delight to read...

VAS
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6 posted 2001-04-23 12:29 PM

Very nice, Alwye!

Irish Rose
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7 posted 2001-04-23 07:46 AM

Bravo!!!!! oooh I like this so much.

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
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BloomingRose
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8 posted 2001-04-23 08:00 AM

Beautiful! Very nicely written.
Deb

RMW
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9 posted 2001-04-23 12:02 PM

Alwye...Simply excellent! Bob

Sven

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10 posted 2001-04-23 01:07 PM

I love the weaving that you've done here with these words. . . it's absolutely wonderful. . .

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vandana

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11 posted 2001-04-24 11:38 AM

enjoy your read

Temptress

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12 posted 2001-04-24 06:43 PM

Oh yes..Absolutely exquisite images. It gives an excellent shiver when I read it.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2001-04-24 10:04 PM

Sigh Krista,
your imagery is so vivid, that you showed me what you we experiencing......

I stand exposed, staring from beyond
Softly illuminated walls...outward...
Through the windowpanes...upward...
To an amethystine tinted sky...
And I watch the clouds glide east
While the crystal cascade falls on.
~~~~~~

Tiny raindrops cling to tree branches
Like translucent autumn berries
~~~~~~

I realize now that I stand embraced,
Each tremble of the atmosphere
Caressing me...
Filling my hollowed spaces
With a subtle, warming ambiance
Created by candlelight...and rain.
~~~~~~~

I could feel the atmosphere created by.... Candlelight and rain
my senses came alive. Thank you.
beautiful writing Krista

Maree

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14 posted 2001-04-24 10:12 PM

Excellent imagery that paints the most vivid pictures in my mind. Wonderful!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

suthern

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15 posted 2001-04-25 04:24 PM

Delightful imagery... beautiful!

Alwye

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In the space between moments

16 posted 2001-04-25 09:13 PM

Thank you so much for all your kind comments, I really appreciate it.

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

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