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B4 Love Turns to Ashes
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B4 Love Turns to Ashes |
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juanrodriguez Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 66ontario canada |
i seat with all my thought but who is there to answer? is there a creator at all or is it just a mith is there love in our hearts or is just possession a sexual passion & desire people say is the spark of fire a love that burns but once burned leaves ashes that the wind blows or is taken as the river flows and its a non stop trip to disaster or a creations of a lil master that grows faster and faster to reedo what u did, or may bleed the world is full of greed millonares want more and its what the poor strugles for so why not share and when a poor man comits robberies they say its unfair for public so lets get together and make this world better instead of compiting help instead of fighting care instead of crying laugh but dont forget to love b4 ur heart turns to ashes [This message has been edited by juanrodriguez (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
There are some very good thoughts here, but if it were mine, I would go back and hit that little button that lets you correct errors. You'll find it above your poem. A good poem should have good spelling, to get very far. Just a suggestion. Joyce |
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juanrodriguez Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 66ontario canada |
thanx fdor ur opinion ...im flatered.. |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
Juan ...have another look at that little pearl of joy and you will know the answer to your creator question.... I love your style so sincere and fresh |
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