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PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-03-26 09:52 AM

May the wind carry you,
Safe passage over troubled waters
Dark and bottomless too,
Stray from drowned and sunken martyrs
In all that you do

Set your sails to catch the breeze,
A vessel that will be propelled
A splash of spray to tease,
Breaking the waves where oft compelled,
Sail now, upon my sea

Let my body carry you,
Underneath forever in the stars
Bright and eternal too,
Smooth the violence of troubled waters
If it’s the last thing we do

So come and begin the journey,
Promise not to sink in the swells
Of varying depths of me,
Where once I rose, and then fell,
Come and sail upon my sea

Just A Woman
Senior Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

1 posted 2001-03-26 10:00 AM

Good morning, PoeticKnight. This was just beautiful.

I love the depths you can reach!

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-03-26 10:42 AM

A true sound of S&G....and a tribute to your poetic pen....

well done Sir!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-03-26 10:52 AM

THis is wonderful.....

sounds like a love song

SEA

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

4 posted 2001-03-26 10:53 AM

good morning to ya'll..thank you so much.

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

5 posted 2001-03-26 10:54 AM

Hey SEA...you snuck in on me...thanks. I wish I could play music, I would make it a song!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-03-26 12:57 PM

You know PK. . . you and I think far too much alike. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-03-26 01:37 PM

May the wind carry you,
Safe passage over troubled waters
Dark and bottomless too,
Stray from drowned and sunken martyrs
In all that you do
===================================
A splash of spray to tease,
Breaking the waves where oft compelled,
Sail now, upon my sea

Let my body carry you,
Underneath forever in the stars
Bright and eternal too,
Smooth the violence of troubled waters
If it’s the last thing we do
====================
Promise not to sink in the swells
Of varying depths of me,
Where once I rose, and then fell,
Come and sail upon my sea
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as always with your work...its hard for me to single out fav lines,
this one has so many unique and poetically creative phrases and images ...

"Safe passage over troubled waters
Dark and bottomless too,
Stray from drowned and sunken martyrs"

"Underneath forever in the stars
Bright and eternal too,"

very cool lines there PK....

and then this is one is a classic example of the talent you have for writing with the subtle, yet intense sensual undertones that flow so poetically appealing thru the emotions expressed...and the depth from which they both come, and take the reader to ... is so very cool.

another example of PK excellence and one of my personal fav's

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

8 posted 2001-03-26 01:52 PM

Apparently, you have strong ties with the sea which enables you write such a nice love story, using what you know best.
Melton

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

9 posted 2001-03-26 02:59 PM

"...begin the journey.." A directive nicely softened by the rest of your poem. Bob

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-06-03

Posts 661
Tennessee

10 posted 2001-03-26 05:48 PM

"Set your sails to catch the breeze.."
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Ah, I love that line. Excellent write.

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

11 posted 2001-03-27 10:22 PM

Such romance and compassion...you have a lovely way with words, PK. I'd like to use this in the next passions newsletter if that's alright.

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

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