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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-04-19 11:29 PM

Behind the Shower Curtain
Virginia Salter

Silhouettes
through steamy
filtered glass sheathing
reflected in the mirror

droplets trickling
vapor rising
billowing the joy of warmth

gentle caresses
rhythmic dancing
entwined in love
a serenade

figments in her mind
those times
merely memory

a life
gone by now

only one
shadowed image
stands
behind dingy
faded
weeping
curtain
stretched across
the shower bar

©April 12, 2000

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2001-04-19 11:58 PM

there is such sadness to this beautiful piece, sending ya a hug, be well....

Greeneyes~

***

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-04-20 12:51 PM

I loved how this flowed, I could see

"Silhouettes
through steamy
filtered glass sheathing
reflected in the mirror"

and then see how with time all that was left

"only one
shadowed image
stands
behind dingy
faded
weeping
curtain
stretched across
the shower bar"

Glad I found this, enjoyed very much.

[This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 04-20-2001).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-04-20 01:16 PM

Well done. Very well done!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

4 posted 2001-04-22 09:59 AM

Cut like crystal, your images were clear to the heart. Placid, and somber, a rewarding read.

Coal

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-04-22 10:06 AM

Virginia.....Virginia.......this is so touching...so lovely. And so very well written. I am ....better....for having you as an acquaintance. Thank you for sharing. Bob

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2001-04-22 10:27 AM

I love the contrast here, Virginia...funny how little things make the change so real. Very nice writing!

Amuse_mi
Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

7 posted 2001-04-22 03:43 PM

This is very much in sync with the human condition, especially the mind set and contrast we all feel between the times of completeness in unity and the loneliness of loss. 'Tis right on the mark, mi thinks.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

8 posted 2001-04-22 04:00 PM

Lovely and invocative. Joyce

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