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Lady In White
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0 posted 2001-04-19 04:36 PM


Candle’s glow, growing
Shadows on the wall, so tall
Fading to black, soon

Move through the darkness
Feel your way around for me
Candle eyes have I

Follow whisper’s sigh
Come to me, in by and by
Candle’s glow, growing



[This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 04-19-2001).]

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Mabel A. Dilley
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1 posted 2001-04-19 04:38 PM


Very gently expressed.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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2 posted 2001-04-19 04:39 PM


this is the first senryu i have ever read.
the way you write it inspires me to find out more. this is a wonderful write.

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3 posted 2001-04-19 05:06 PM


This is very romantic the way i read it.
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4 posted 2001-04-19 05:16 PM


Now this is funny - Julian (wish she would come back) as she was telling me a funny story last night about a poetry class she had taken and she had to write about a candle - and here you go writing about the best darn candle I have ever seen - he he Just fantastic!  
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5 posted 2001-04-19 05:26 PM


lovely
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6 posted 2001-04-19 05:52 PM


moving through darkness
reaching for you tenderly
romantic thoughts soar

I hear whisper'd sigh
tactilely map your body
fervor is growing

lips seek counterpart
as we rest from our ardor
smile in afterglow

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


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7 posted 2001-04-19 07:41 PM


Beautifully expressed.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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8 posted 2001-04-19 09:05 PM


LiW = I do believe - You'd be found - with  or without candles - were the room pitch black = your attraction much too great
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9 posted 2001-04-24 10:51 PM


another one i enjoyed
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10 posted 2001-04-24 11:01 PM



candle's passion glows
illuminating brightly
burning at both ends..
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