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Candles Senryu
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Candles Senryu |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Shadows on the wall, so tall Fading to black, soon Move through the darkness Feel your way around for me Candle eyes have I Follow whisper’s sigh Come to me, in by and by Candle’s glow, growing [This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Very gently expressed. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
this is the first senryu i have ever read. the way you write it inspires me to find out more. this is a wonderful write. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
This is very romantic the way i read it. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now this is funny - Julian (wish she would come back) as she was telling me a funny story last night about a poetry class she had taken and she had to write about a candle - and here you go writing about the best darn candle I have ever seen - he he  Just fantastic! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
lovely |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
moving through darkness reaching for you tenderly romantic thoughts soar I hear whisper'd sigh tactilely map your body fervor is growing lips seek counterpart as we rest from our ardor smile in afterglow Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautifully expressed. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
LiW = I do believe - You'd be found - with or without candles - were the room pitch black = your attraction much too great |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
another one i enjoyed |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
candle's passion glows illuminating brightly burning at both ends.. |
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