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snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

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0 posted 2001-04-18 07:00 PM

I could tell you how you affected me
when you looked into my eyes,
but I think it would be more precise
for me to steal the stars
and let them shine through me...

I would try to explain what you’ve done to my heart
by walking into my life,
but, perhaps, one day, you could stand
where the shore meets the ocean
and see how far that distant lighthouse really is...

my dear, I could, technically, tell you of my love
for the genuinely benevolent heart within you,
but I think it would do you more justice
to wait until after the rain
when the rainbow makes its way across the hazy sky...

my precious love, I long for you to see just how I feel
when you touch me so softly,
but, first, let me take you to the valley,
where we will stand under the waterfall
and let it drench us completely in its relentless inundation...

-kh 04/18/01

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk into the room...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-18 07:19 PM

I could tell you how you affected me
when you looked into my eyes,
but I think it would be more precise
for me to steal the stars
and let them shine through me...
====================================

and now you have done that.....

outstanding employ of metaphor, imagery, elemental comparions and poetic phrases.
very cool write of devotion sp.

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-04-18 07:27 PM

Enjoyed!

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

3 posted 2001-04-18 07:32 PM

Kris--
i HAD to respond! this is just
stunningly beautiful!! Oh my
friend--how i've missed your pen.
love ya lots girlie.
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2001-04-18 07:39 PM

snowpants - this is most stunning, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Your pen dances tonight with magic.

BC

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

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Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-04-18 11:04 PM

Excellent imagery, sp. This was magical!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

6 posted 2001-04-19 01:31 AM

suthern,

Oh my...this is SO romantic and lovely. I think everyone wishes for this kind of love. Thanks for sharing this.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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7 posted 2001-04-19 11:07 AM

enjoy

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

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8 posted 2001-04-19 01:12 PM

absolutely wonderful snowpants. . . *sigh*

indeed it is a love that we all want. . . thank you for sharing. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2001-04-19 01:20 PM

Oh I do love the romance of this beautiful poem......

SEA

snowpants
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KS

10 posted 2001-04-19 07:13 PM

JM: why thank you, m'friend...I am glad you stopped by, as always!

JLR:  thanks!

Aims:  awww...thanks, girlie!  you are too sweet!  it's great to see you here!!  -e  ~~~~~

Bill:  thank you for your kind reply!  I am glad you liked it!

LW: thanks so much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed!

Michael: hmmm...well, I'm not suthern, but, I will take your wonderful compliments!

and, I am lucky enough to have found such love as this...thank you much!

Vandana: thanks! glad you enjoyed!

Sven: yes, indeed it is...and I have waited long enough!

I feel very fortunate!

SEA: thanks!! I'm glad you liked this!!

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk into the room...

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

11 posted 2001-04-19 08:16 PM

Truly wonderful piece you have here, snowpants! I enjoyed it very much!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

12 posted 2001-04-19 11:48 PM

SnowPants~
Cascading with beautiful thoughts.
Enjoyed the render very much.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Tennessee Angel
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since 2000-06-03

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Tennessee

13 posted 2001-04-20 12:04 PM

Absolutely wonderful! You just get better with every read! Loved it.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2001-04-20 12:58 PM

I was thinking how beautiful this is and how I wish I'd written it... so I'm ROFL at Michael's goof... my wish thoughts must have guided his fingers. LOL. Great poem, wonderful images... methinks you're a lucky poet. *G*

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

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Deep in the heart

15 posted 2001-04-20 01:24 PM

Someone sounds awfully happy

Well done!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

16 posted 2001-04-20 02:11 PM

Applauding!!!!!!! Excellent, snowpants!

"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

17 posted 2001-04-20 05:09 PM

Lovely...I want to visit that waterfall...James

snowpants
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KS

18 posted 2001-04-20 05:51 PM

Marie: thank you so much! I am glad you liked it!

Marge: thank you, m'friend...I am glad you could stop by for a read!

TA: why, thank you, my friend...you flatter me with your kind reply! I am so glad you like this!!

suthern: now, that's one of the best compliments I've ever gotten...a 'wish I had written that...' And, I want to thank you so much for that...and, yep...I do believe I am very lucky as well!

Interloper: yes, there are only one or two things in this world that could make me happier...thank you so much for stopping by!

JAW: thank you for the applause! I truly appreciate it! glad you liked!

JamesMichael: yes, it is a wonderful place, indeed, and I am sure you will visit there someday...thank you!

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk into the room...

kitkat
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since 2000-01-11

Posts 878
Nova Scotia

19 posted 2001-04-21 07:45 AM

*sighing* Lovely and Romantic. Great write.

rosepetals25

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PA

20 posted 2001-04-21 07:56 AM

snowpants,

"my dear, I could, technically, tell you of my love
for the genuinely benevolent heart within you,
but I think it would do you more justice
to wait until after the rain
when the rainbow makes its way across the hazy sky..."

Wow snowpants... the images you've created are simply amazingly beautiful! I loved this...

TaraB

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

21 posted 2001-04-21 09:27 PM

kitkat: thanks! glad you liked this!

Tara: why thank you! I appreciate your kind reply! glad you enjoyed!

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk into the room...

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