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Gramps (the innocence)
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Gramps (the innocence) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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Gramps A man who had a bit of cash in his pipe ash burned pocket a smelly burred-up wet spaniel an old hand- painted Buick and a wife who was habitually late to everything including her own dinners in her own house to be a grandson of such a man when we were wide eyed babes and in love with the morning sun and the go-to-bed nights we loved it all in the fresh and new the innocence the unbittered taste of it all before we knew . . . © Krawdad 2.18.01 [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 04-18-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wow! That last line really threw me. before you knew what? Curiosity has me beside myself...should I be able to figure it out by what I read? I enjoyed reading the poem, but for me, it ended with a giant question mark |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
e........before we knew........the game.......the pain.........happy to see you back.........h |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
That really blew me away. Awesome piece! I enjoyed reading this one! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
VAS - Well, actually this was two "bits" written on two consecutive days and were not connected until the other night when I was thumbing through my pad and saw a connection. The last line refers back through the last stanza to the first stanza. The child, still in free fall, does not yet know about the poverty, the love, the loneliness, the desperation of it all. h . . . you got it . . . thank you . . . e Fading Away - Thanks so much for stopping by and thanks for the "awesome"! Glad you liked. Krawdad |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
yes...this is indeed very awesome KRAW... it hit me in that spot..  much enjoyed this one..to the library with you..  hugs, g time makes us bolder..even children get older..and i'm gettin' older too... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
dg, nice of you to stop by and thanks for the "very awesome". hugs back at ya . . . e |
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