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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2001-04-16 03:21 AM

The pain I must endure
You said our love would die
I swore to you I’d be
The last to say goodbye

The rose will wither ‘way
Inside the final book
You tire to write of me
I’m scared to take a look

The pain is too unkind
Duets in morning sky
I swore to you I’d be
The last to say goodbye

I see you from so far
You promised you would stay
I would not say goodbye
You died here anyway

Petals drop to the floor
The book I haven’t read
Tears, the words you used
Were always how I bled

I said that I would be
The last to say goodbye
But you stand over me
With a wet and tearing eye

The rose will not grow now
Our love can’t be defined
Fields of adoration
Don’t need the sun to shine

Our book, we write together
Each page, a hand picked rose
And there are no goodbyes
That’s how our love will grow

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 04-16-2001).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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1 posted 2001-04-16 07:04 AM

Petals drop to the floor
The book I haven’t read
Tears, the words you used
Were always how I bled

love these lines...and the ending too, Walt

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

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2 posted 2001-04-16 09:08 AM

"You say 'good-bye' and I'll say 'hello'... 'hello, hello...".... Hello walty... from warm Lauderdale...

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-04-16 10:46 AM

Our book, we write together
Each page, a hand picked rose
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Lovely.

Write on!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-04-16 10:56 AM

What a sad write....

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2001-04-16 04:22 PM

Fields of adoration
Don’t need the sun to shine

This is beautiful Walt.

rosepetals25

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6 posted 2001-04-16 11:28 PM

Walt,

There are to many amazing lines to pick one as my favorite. Touching and feeling evoking phrases are all throughout this poem. I'm so glad I stopped in.

TaraB

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

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7 posted 2001-04-17 12:11 PM

thank you. you all felt the way i did as writer of this

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

8 posted 2001-04-17 11:11 AM

I like this, walt... particularly the last verse. Well done!

vandana

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USA

9 posted 2001-04-17 11:19 AM

loved it

cruz
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since 2000-07-18

Posts 282
Dallas,Texas USA

10 posted 2001-04-20 09:37 AM

This reminds me of an emotional roller coaster. The words spoken here seem alltooreal, with deep sadness (The pain I must endure You said our love would die). Then, you go on to say something so different (And there are no goodbyes
That’s how our love will grow). It seems as though the deep sadness is when the writer dies and his/her love is crying at the grave. Well, this is what I got out of it, i think its pretty spiffy.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2001-04-20 10:39 AM

Walt, WOW what a tender piece. Truly beautiful!!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

12 posted 2001-04-20 12:05 PM

How did I miss this one, it's very moving.....

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

13 posted 2001-04-22 02:48 PM

Walt~
What endearing sentiment -

'I swore to you I’d be
The last to say goodbye'

Brought a tear to these eyes~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

14 posted 2001-04-22 02:53 PM

Lovely. Especially the last line. Joyce

Amuse_mi
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since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

15 posted 2001-04-22 03:06 PM

This would make awesome lyrics.

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