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Alwye

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In the space between moments

0 posted 2001-04-13 11:53 PM

Rain splattered pavement
Glints soft in the lamplight
Dappling quietly from overhead
While the night breathes the fragrance
Of sultry, steaming summer rain
Upon these sleeping streets.

Puddles ringed in oily rainbows
Splash beneath my feet
Sending liquid silver sprays
Exploding upward
Toward the sable sky....
I cast my eyes to Heaven
~Watching intently~
As the raindrops melt
Into beads of starlight.

Mud sprayed guitar case
Slung upon my back
Reminds me of the reasons
I ignore the thunderheads
And my water logged soul
~To trudge forward~
And draw illusive dreams
To my hungry spirit.

The rhythm of the tempest
Pounds upon my shivered skin,
Blending intimately
With melody woven from
My very essence...
And the rain splattered pavement
Brings me comfort
Because I choose this journey
~This lustrous reverie~
For me...and only me.

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

Auguste

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By the sea

1 posted 2001-04-14 12:11 PM

Alwye,

This is the first of your work I've read. This is very lovely, wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing this nice piece.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

helen smith
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2 posted 2001-04-14 06:14 AM

thank you. It was nice to enter the privacy of your very essence.....and splash through the puddles with you .

Dee
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Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-04-14 06:23 AM

Alwye, such a beautiful picture you have painted, i can almost hear the rain. Oopps, it is raining!
i really enjoyed this.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Dusk Treader

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St. Paul, MN

4 posted 2001-04-15 09:04 PM

Krista the wandering musician sounds right to me. Another excellent piece of writing, enjoyed your telling of the rain and the persona of the narrator..

Loved the last stanza especially.. Lately I've been acquiring this idea from reading that the whole world is one great song with everything adding their part.

Enjoyed this one, my dear, definetly fits the weather around here, LOL

"And every state of mind, left to itself, every shutting up of the creature within the dungeon of its own mind - is, in the end, Hell" - C.S. Lewis

Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula

5 posted 2001-04-16 04:33 PM

wonderful job Krissa.. a nice write!

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*

suthern

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6 posted 2001-04-17 10:54 AM

Excellent writing... great descriptions! *S*

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2001-04-17 12:23 PM

Ah, this is wonderful! But then, your works are always beautiful!

Heavens Tears

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8 posted 2001-04-18 05:29 PM

This poem was wonderful! I found it on like page 6. It deserves to be on page 1 again.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

snowpants
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KS

9 posted 2001-05-03 09:32 PM

Well, I don't know how I missed this, but it is absolutely fantastic! The imagery is perfect...totally loved it! Wonderfully insightful write!

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

Martie

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10 posted 2001-05-03 09:58 PM

Very lovely images you have painted in your words...thank you for this enjoyment.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2001-05-03 10:58 PM

Krista~
This is just a wonderful piece !
So real and natural ...

'Puddles ringed in oily rainbows
Splash beneath my feet
Sending liquid silver sprays
Exploding upward'

The imagery is spectacular ~
Well written, poet.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Kit McCallum

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12 posted 2001-05-04 07:53 AM

"Puddles ringed in oily rainbows
Splash beneath my feet
Sending liquid silver sprays
Exploding upward
Toward the sable sky...."

Wonderfully picturesque Krista! Incredible imagery you've penned here, I almost felt myself walking through this with you, and yet ... you've captured the feeling so perfectly of how we choose and walk these journeys for "ourselves" ... I love how you wove these sentiments into this lovely piece ... beautiful writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2001-05-04 10:21 AM

Krista I loved this, some great images you have painted my dear

Maree

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