Dark Poetry #3 |
No Forgiveness (Dirty Girl) |
poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Im such a dirty girl filthy tramp with nothing to offer but temptation arsenic laced sickening suicide brat pity party princess lets give applause for a job well done abusing neglecting subjecting you to sick perversion obscene joke of a human being let me be used I deserve it swallow me whole abuse me hate me then just leave me for dead. [This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 07-21-2001).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
joke of a human being let me be used I deserve it swallow me whole abuse me hate me then just leave me for dead. (OK I know I said I had left Passions but this is a special exception) You know that I have always enjoyed your poetry I would like to say that I enjoyed this but sorry I did not, I think I need to re write this put a bit more truth and love into. BULL that "you deserve that", that is [edit]. I have so much more I want to say, but not here. Check your e-mail box. If this a goodbye from you then take care, the last year was great. If it is not then talk to you in two days time. I am going to bed shortly, I have had a long day. I am sure you will be going to sleep soon. Sleep well. Tell Trent I said hi. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 07-24-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
as writing, this is just too powerful. . . the images here are just too close to the vest and too harsh for me to actually think of the person speaking about themselves in this way. . . now then, if this is personal, let me just say that no one is ever this bad. . . everyone is good. . . you are no exception. . . the truth?? I don't think that it's here. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dark Poet Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 99North Carolina, USA |
This was thought provoking as I read it. I compliment you greatly on this piece as it snagged me as drug me word for word from beginning to end. James |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
thank you for your kind replies, they were much appreciated. ~Dawn |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
wow wowow owow owowo woow owow ow wowowow that was the [edit]..../Drew/ [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 07-26-2001).] |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Dawn ~ I have felt much like this after I was raped. I have several poems on this same line but I have never been able to post them. I love your work and I hope to see more. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I like this. I even borrowed a bit of it to make my own poem of a similar nature. "The Lady’s a Tramp" Gloom |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
let me just say that I know how you feel if you feel like this. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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brian thomas madden Junior Member
since 2010-07-08
Posts 32Ireland (between an ocean and a rock) |
the response I gave to your poem left a sour taste in moment after reading it now. If you ever find this know that the anger was misplaced, I can't remember how we slipped away from each other. So much time has passed and I understand far more than I did then. I wish I had the clarity and maturity to have been more supportive and to have been a better friend. |
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