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The Exile Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 52Ontario, Canada 
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I knelt down on the ground of sand and rocks, The sky is grey and land is lonely. I could see nothing around out of this chaos, I put my palms together looked into the sky. With the last tears in my eyes suddenly I saw, A small piece of white feather, Drifting and falling down slowly from above, Spinning ceaselessly until it landed on my hands. Thus the clouds opened as I saw, A beam of light shining down from above, You came out in the light holding a sword. Passing it to me as you spoke with love: "Behold is the sword of life my knight, fight with it and thou shall see light!" |
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Jeen Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91 |
Exile I like this very much. It reminds me of the book of Revelations. I like the spiritual undertones in your writings too. The word "ceaslessly" hung me up a little. But the imagery was great. Jeen |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Your poems intrigue me because you often have different view points in each poem and I'm really starting to look forward to anything new that you might write. But the phrase ceaselessly spinning seems to be a bit odd somehow. But I do like this. ~Keep dreaming~ |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Your poems intrigue me because you often have different view points in each poem and I'm really starting to look forward to anything new that you might write. But the phrase spinning ceaselessly seems to be a bit odd somehow. But I do like this. ~Keep dreaming~ |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
very intersting piece |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
WoW, very powerful piece here!!   ELMO "No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!" |
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