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PointlesS Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 21Oconomowoc, Wisconsin |
Caught up in life, without a friend He chose to do it, put his life to an end So much potential he could've done well But now he's dead and probably in hell We ignored his cries of pain No one cared, it drove him insane No one else, but himself to blame He ended it all, to get away from shame A bright future is what lied ahead But he thought otherwise and wanted to be dead A smart kid is what I recall It's a shame he never talked at all So short he was compared to most So quiet he was just a ghost Never again will we hear him speak Even though he talked once a week Who was this person and why did he do it? You should know, but you won't admit A knife he chose, his neck, he stike You always ignored him, it was only Mike |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
This makes me think of a young man here in our apts. He weighs about 450 pounds or more and no one talks to him. I always speak to him in the laundry room and try to strike up a conversation, but he never speaks. Breaks my heart to see his life dwindle away at such a young age. I hear he's about 22, or 23 years old and has such a long life ahead of him if he could only believe in himself. I always try to talk to him, but he has never spoken yet.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sadly, this happens all too frequently, and we are all left asking WHY? and most of the time, we cannot find an answer that makes any sense. And we can never ask after the fact. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Patrick . . . an important message indeed too many people are lost before they are found Nice writing xxoo |
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gpc Junior Member
since 2003-03-01
Posts 43 |
I identify with what you're trying to do here but to me the whole poem came across as a self-parody. The stanza ... Caught up in life, without a friend He chose to do it, put his life to an end So much potential he could've done well But now he's dead and probably in hell ... just struck me as hilarious not serious. The rhyme just seems to add a humorous twist to the poem. |
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