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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2003-09-14 02:27 AM



stare helpless at the hand

figure it's geometry
        the leverage is all wrong
it can't work
    the way it should
stupid flesh

stupid
stupid
flesh

never married to this steel
properly

wood feels good
but
that is illusion

awkward angles
       will kill
despair's hope

go instead
go
look at the dung-eyed wonder
in the poetry of mirrors

small
insignificant little bug
       with nobody to squash you


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littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-09-14 01:06 PM


Bri - dont you dare make me look at myself!
Goddd . . . scary . . .
*smile*
insignificant?  no  
but I understand
xxoo

mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

2 posted 2003-09-14 09:55 PM


Nice metaphors, nice write.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2003-09-15 06:05 PM


If you are a beetle, I must be the dung...

smile.

And I wanted to be on top, too.

*pout*

sigh.

missing you hard right now...

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
4 posted 2003-09-16 12:21 PM



Smiling at you...and chuckling at Karen...smile

Very cool, Bri...love this...

Hugging you both...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
5 posted 2003-09-18 03:25 AM


this needs to breathe . . .
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
6 posted 2003-09-22 04:22 PM


stupid
stupid
flesh

Loved that.


Susan

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