Dark Poetry #3 |
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Jaime
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Time bending. the solar quake sudden and apathetic my vision Mutation of shark. I've tasted too much Looming in the blue darkness I blend into and become part of this habitat Sometimes silver sometimes red. The skeletons left in my teeth like pulp I've swallowed too much 091703 the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I like. It sounds "dead" figuretivly speaking. Nice write. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
camoflauging...nice write "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you've got me hooked! Always a great write from you Jaime Maree. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
i think this, as all of the poems i've seen of yours, is very very good. great Job! =) rok on chica!!! "The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle |
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Insomniac Cat Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 69The Land of the Dadaists |
Nice. I like poems that make me muse on them. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jaime: awesome writing loved the whole thing and here: Sometimes silver sometimes red. The skeletons left in my teeth like pulp nice metaphors xxoo |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
The imagery you portray is so descriptive. A very good read. Maggie |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
I agree with everything everyone has said by my favorite lines are "sometimes silver, sometimes red". Beatifully done. |
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