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This Flesh |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys 
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In all but us is all but we seek. Green moss on your peach hips- How I love but to get one kiss, Can you see my purple pain- Can you feel my yellow energy- Can you understand my blackened mind? Am I all but me inside of we, The he inside of she- The us inside of us. I see the orange red pain in your heart, Spilling out for my ugly blue eyes to see, It saddens me, I want to heal your pain. I love you. Can you feel my pink passion- Can you taste my fleshy love. I am but a color inside of clear- Can you see me when all is dark? And I am you only light, Will you come to my angelic glow? Will you see me there in the dark? "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." [This message has been edited by eor (09-13-2003 08:24 PM).] |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
How could they not come to your light? Even in your darkest point, good resides. If it did not, you wouldn't care. Well that's what came to my mind. Me thinks you could use a   SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Matt: the first line got me right off the bat , so so true: In all but us is all but we seek. truly and if she doesnt see or understand she is a fool I adored this write and yes I'll double what Shara said love your signature btw LMAO true so true xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (09-13-2003 09:37 PM).] |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thats pretty thick and deep. Nice write. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
eor, the first and last lines fit very nicely. Like sandwiching the entire meaning. Great form. Oh, take it easy on the blue eye's. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
Terri-thanks i needed a hug Sue-when i write there is no revision process(if my professors knew they would kill me, lol)i just write what comes to the mind. and yeah i like my signiture too, it says it all. thank you Greeny-thanks as alwyas for stopping by to see little ol me. Poe-last but not least, always, thanks my man for giving me a look see, and next time i will try to tkae it easy on the ol blue eyes. Thank you, all of you "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow..I'm fasinated by this one. You outdid yourself. Amazing... I am but a color inside of clear- I loved this line. It is obvious and beautiful that you are in love. ~Lex  |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
wow lexy...you hit it on the nose... "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Self analysis cand be pretty scary. I think this is one of your best, it made me think.Luv maggie |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Nicely done man, very beautiful and the use of colours in the descriptions was a very, very nice touch. Great write. |
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