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Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada

0 posted 2003-09-15 02:43 AM



Suburban cataclysm
Never thought the apocalypse
Would be so crystalline
I could almost kiss the moon
Everything that I found
Wasn’t what I wanted it to be
Come with me
To the crimson sea
Build a life out of liquid death
Suburban afterlife
Never though my own death
Would be so tranquil
I could almost see you there
Everything I became
Is everything I tired to destroy
Come with me
And I’ll fade away
Build a hope out of broken lies
This isn’t the end
Of you, or him, or her
This is the end of me
And everything I tried to be

© Copyright 2003 Ryan - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-09-15 09:36 AM


Ahh Ryan a nice awakening indeed
awesome writing
xxoo

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-09-15 05:07 PM


I could almost kiss the moon

I loved this line. sad, yet touching piece. Great job hatter.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
3 posted 2003-09-16 07:25 PM


Nice write.  Its like a constant vice that you cant escape and ends up crushing you.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Mad_Hatter
Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
4 posted 2003-09-27 05:06 PM


Thank you all...you are all very special people
mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

5 posted 2003-09-27 09:28 PM


come with me to the crimson sea. Beautiful line.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

[This message has been edited by mysticpoe (09-27-2003 09:29 PM).]

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