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Dark Poetry #3

I'm sort of disappearing

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-09-11 10:15 AM

I sort of feel like I'm disappearing
as I walk down the street tonight.
Like the fog from the street lights is dissolving me.
And there's happy couples drinking tea.
The steam settles and grows mildew along my lips.
Mocking my existence.
I'll look toward home,
eyes glued to the concrete.
A touch is maddening...
Detached from my body,
asking why they've laid they're fingers upon me.
Charity.
It's been a long time.
There's no almost.
all or nothing.
I sort of feel like disappearing.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-11-2003 10:16 AM).]

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

1 posted 2003-09-11 10:45 AM

I like this poem a lot and I can definitely relate...

Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last.

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

2 posted 2003-09-11 12:46 PM

Oh my goodness.. this is so beautiful! Your poetry seems to really speak to me. I connect with your style of writing and sentiments. Wonderful feelings expressed here! Thank you.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-09-12 01:56 AM

Lexy yep - everyday while the world keeps on being:

Like the fog from the street lights is dissolving me.
And there's happy couples drinking tea.

nice writing
xxoo

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-09-13 08:08 PM

i am also fading inot the fog wiht every breath. you painted a very sad picture, loved every letter, adding this

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

5 posted 2003-09-14 10:03 PM

A very forceful and determine tone. Nice writ.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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