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Five Knights |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
Five Knights rode out to field Their armour shone, pristine white Standing out against the emerald green grass To sight there was nothing purer Bright blades like shards of light hung at side They road out, out on emerald field T'wards dark beast, of pain and hate Apathy and fear. The first rode towards it, unslung its blade. And the beast regarded him with one eye, "You fear," It spake. "No..." groaned Knight With fear in his heart, he swung Was blocked, and died. The second Knight rode out, The beast regarded him with one eye, "You can hurt," it spake. "No!" screamed Knight He swung and felt the pain of life He was blocked, and felled. Out Thundered third. The beast regarded him with one eye, "You hate," it spake. "No!" raged Knight He swung with blinded anger Was blocked, and destroyed. The fourth moved out The beast regarded him with one eye, "You care not," it spake. No answer. The Knight swung without care, was blocked and passed away. The final Knight rode out Clothed in Light but knew himself inside The beast regarded him, "You fear and hate and hurt," "And you knew my secret," "But cared not save fellow knights" "Yes" spake simply the Knight The Knight took his shard of light reversed it, and drove the blade deep deep into his own breast, and the beast screamed. There they died. Beasts all. Darkness all ------ Its been some time since I posted here... |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Nice change, enjoyed the read. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Daniel: ahhh this was awesommmme I never expected that ending i thought for sure the last knight was the one *wicked smile* battle never won awesome job xxoo |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
wow!!! fantastic write, you left me wanting more and more, i really think this could be a great short story, thanks for sharing "There never was a genius without a tincture of madness." |
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ShadowRaven Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 51 |
Ye Gods! That was brilliant! Loved it! [This message has been edited by ShadowRaven (08-27-2003 01:35 AM).] |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Very wonderful poem. I loved that ending, it was so anti-cliche, very refreshing. Great stuff. |
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