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Dark Poetry #3

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somethinginyoursocks
Junior Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 28
IN, the U.S. of A.

0 posted 2003-08-25 10:45 PM

A molding clay called "words"
    with colors and scents and noises.
Children make snakes and pots
    next to adults and their real faces.

Read the words, juxtapose
    the discoveries of those faces;
See the light of childhood pots
    and feel the warmth of innocent places.

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SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

1 posted 2003-08-25 10:54 PM

It's so true. Children can make things so innocent again, and shed a light on all things through their sweet, gentle eyes.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

somethinginyoursocks
Junior Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 28
IN, the U.S. of A.

2 posted 2003-08-25 10:58 PM

This one isn't finished, yet. I'm still trying to get a good direction for it and any suggestions that are original are welcome.

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eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-08-27 12:16 PM

i would like to see this when it is finished

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-08-27 02:24 AM

socks . . .
describe your feelings instead of saying noises colors sounds . . .

brrr . . tip tap
azure, chestnut
like the crash of a falling vase

use metaphors . . .
alliteration, assonance

ya got a good start here btw
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (08-27-2003 02:25 AM).]

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

5 posted 2003-08-27 08:29 AM

Nice style something.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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