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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-08-13 10:06 PM

I feel like a lame excuss
An existence slow and boring
Life its self seems to be hardening
To a metal rod,
With spikes,
And a handle

I have control
But have no idea
Where is this taking me?
How deep in my head will this trip plunge

A psycho in the wilderness
Desires and passions rot
Personal to personel
A belonging or
Package with a marvelous and gigantic pink bow

My own decisions
Will they be shot down in the dirt
With a government powdered rifle

At the same time my twitching stomache
Is telling me stop and do what Im suppose to do
Splintered compass
Burning map
Chaotic atmosphere

Fight
Destroy
And do it again
Mindless mind of my own
Ward and warn
Pin and break
Change
Rage
Fear

Real and solid
Thickened roots
Melt into oblivion
Beautiful oblivion

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

1 posted 2003-08-14 10:31 AM

This is so intense. Just don't do anything that you might regret. Lecture over. Maggie

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2003-08-14 11:09 PM

thanx maggie. things are getting weird now and i feel like crap.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-08-16 02:07 AM

i read tis a couple of times, and the only thing that came to mind was wow...wow as in you put some crazy ish inside of my head, you did your job as a writer and made the reader think in a differnt way, nice write

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

4 posted 2003-08-16 04:33 PM

Thanx eor. I guess Ive finally figured out my style. Intensity.....

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-08-16 10:44 PM

"At the same time my twitching stomache
Is telling me stop and do what Im suppose to do
Splintered compass
Burning map
Chaotic atmosphere"

wow...impressive, intense, sad, moving in a weird way. I loved this.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

6 posted 2003-08-17 02:30 AM

Thanx Lexy.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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