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Annie
Junior Member

since 2003-07-23

Posts 42
Seattle, WA

0 posted 2003-08-01 02:23 AM

It creep’s
It crawl’s
ever so
carefully
through my
brain.
Eight legs in
slow motion
waiting.
I dare not
fear
I must not
move.
The deadly
bite
soon will
come
bring haunting
pain.
Broken webbed
memories
closing around
me.
There is no
serum
to erase the past.

(Annex)
Crawl carefully
through my brain
my friend
I only took
a needle
to mend.

"Well I know, these voices must be my soul." -Dave Matthews-

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mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

1 posted 2003-08-01 12:50 PM

Very nicely done!!

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2003-08-01 02:51 PM

Almost like a trap. Nice write.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Annie
Junior Member

since 2003-07-23

Posts 42
Seattle, WA

3 posted 2003-08-01 02:57 PM

A trap, a viscous circle . . . a warning.

"Well I know, these voices must be my soul." -Dave Matthews-

ClaptonsLayla
New Member

since 2003-08-02

Posts 5

4 posted 2003-08-02 11:30 AM

Simply written yet well set out. I like this piece and the end sting. This is an all round good one.

Ankaria
Junior Member

since 2003-07-26

Posts 35
Sask. Canada

5 posted 2003-08-03 02:40 PM

I like your style of writing. This poem lures you in and almost captures you from the past. I like it

.

Ankaria
"Is all we see or seem, but a dream within a dream?"
-Edgar Allen Poe

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

6 posted 2003-08-14 12:12 PM

nice write, enjoyed the style of it.

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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