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Dark Poetry #3

Dancing in miles

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2003-07-21 01:14 AM

I stood next to the tracks,
dancing my words through
gusts of triumph.

Drawn around those insolent souls,
Carved in and out,
I leap in-between my dreams.

Beliefs are scolded,
Being sugar coated with mirror clocks,
Closely engaging their enchanting drum.

Remind the bull to yield before charging,
As innocence is drawn with caution.

Dreams are dreamt,
As my carriage draws closer,
Laying perched along the roads demeanor.

Forever I dream,
Because I was told never to fret,
Holding keys to mile high doors.

I jilt back and forth,
Around those cosmic trains,
But never lose my stable chain.

A reversal of fortune,
I kindly retain an ounce of being human.

[This message has been edited by Tomer (07-21-2003 01:28 AM).]

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

1 posted 2003-07-21 09:16 AM

I like this Tomer, nice write.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-07-21 01:13 PM

Tomer~
GREAT ending. " I leap in between my dreams" I love that line. You have such a unique way of looking at things. I have heartfelt appreciation for your talents. Another amazing poem. Bravo!

~Lex..

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-21-2003 01:14 PM).]

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-07-21 05:54 PM

nice write, intresting imagery...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

4 posted 2003-07-21 11:17 PM

It looks like "Dark" is gettin' good again.

Liking new new blood!

Carry on.

~wranx

"You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next"

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2003-07-22 02:17 AM

Thank you for all of the wonderful responses, I appreciate everyones input.

Tomer

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