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Lexia Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 111Nowhere |
Alone Sometimes the darkness Threatens to overtake me My soul is slipping away Into the depths of hell Evil thoughts take my mind Feeding evil voices Telling me things I don’t want to hear Or maybe I do What if I need the darkness The voices that tell me things And have my soul under their control They’re slowly killing me As I lie here Staring at blue walls Alone |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
I totally understand this one. Been there, done that and got the good ole t-shirt |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
you're not alone... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Welcome, enjoyed the write. Well done! i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right, |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
This is ok. Nothing particularly jumped out at me. I felt no impact..I was bored, too many things that have been said before. I did like the last line though, "staring at the blue walls, alone." You talk of hell, or a hell like place and red is usually the first color that comes to mind, so the fact that you used blue..I thought that was ironic, I liked it. Keep postin' ~Lex...  |
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