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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-07-20 03:04 PM

I wish I could say I was alive..
half or completely.
Such a low percentage of me is left.
Empty and full..neither in a good way.

Left here, to destroy all memory of you.
For no reason imparticular.
Attempting to recover from this impact to my heart.
Alas, there is no use.

I'm waiting, wasting my hours on nothing.
Broading over feelings I can't dispose of.
Are you listening at all?
I don't think your hearing me correctly.
Deaf to my plea.
You hear what you want to.
Bleed when you want to hurt.
Cry to make a point.
Everything is logical with you.

I'm throwing punches, pointlessly.
You stand before me..with that stupid plastic grin
painted on.
Emotion is impossible, you stare with marble eyes.
Unaffected by me.

A bullet proof window stands between us,
your on the inside, always safe.
I'm on the outside, always in pain.
My bullets bounce back and hit me,
and I get what I deserve.
Look at me, look at this stupid girl..
with black tears in her eyes.
blood on her face.
Crying over nothing at all.
Burning in her private hell.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-20-2003 03:06 PM).]

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

1 posted 2003-07-20 04:35 PM

Well, you've created a picture here that I can clearly see, probably because it seems a little like my life.

The last stanza really made this poem for me. I could see the emotions clearly conveyed.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2003-07-20 05:08 PM

Nicely stated...a good write

~wranx

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-07-21 12:23 PM

i'm listening...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

4 posted 2003-07-21 01:36 AM

Well done lexy-
you really painted a picture for me here. The first few lines truly wrapped me in. Always a delight.

Tomer

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

5 posted 2003-07-22 02:47 PM

excellent write. private hells are always interesting to hear.

missmisery61
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 56

6 posted 2003-07-22 03:02 PM

I think there is probably nothing worse than having such strong feelings for someone, and that person being incapable of returning them. I felt the emotion in this.

So lord I see you grinnin' must be grand always winning....AIC

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

7 posted 2003-07-22 03:22 PM

Thank you, I appreciate all of the kind replies. I really like this piece..so its good to hear others do as well.
~Lex....

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-22-2003 03:22 PM).]

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