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Magia_negra
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 77
CA, USA

0 posted 2003-07-19 06:21 PM





Desert. You. Me.
Tarantula touching my toes.
I'd like to run away with coyotes
To escape from your voice.

I stand there naked, burned
Watch you playing with the knife.
As soon as they smell the blood
For me they'll come, for my life.

Why do you want my death?
What have I done wrong?
Haven't I been true?
Haven't I been strong?

Desert is filling me with dust.
It is eating my lungs, my brains
There are no borders, no roads
Just the horizon, space.

I stand there naked, with empty heart
With broken wings and stolen pride
I'd like to run away with coyotes
Far away in the healing night.

Friend, you're a monster
I am tired of this pain
I am ready to die now
Whispering your name.

Desert. You. Me.
Tarantula touching my toes.
Kill me fast. Make me free
From you beautiful voice.

...somos los locos para siempre
para siempre te amo
   mi vida...

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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-07-19 07:36 PM


this is so good, very unique. I little vague, but I guess its good that way.
~Lex

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
2 posted 2003-07-19 10:21 PM


as I suspected...

it serves you very well

the power is strong in you

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
3 posted 2003-07-20 12:43 PM


good write i really like the descriptiveness of it...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
4 posted 2003-07-21 11:21 PM


A good read...Solid write


~wranx

"You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next"


missmisery61
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since 2003-07-08
Posts 56

5 posted 2003-07-22 03:26 PM


I sense in this that someone is holding captive your emotions, bleeding you if you will.  I feel as if you are begging for them to "end it", thereby allowing your release.  Very good write.

So lord I see you grinnin' must be grand always winning....AIC

Magia_negra
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 77
CA, USA
6 posted 2003-07-22 04:06 PM


Thank you all
Missmisery, you got me

...somos los locos para siempre
para siempre te amo
   mi vida...

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