Dark Poetry #3 |
Senses |
EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Senses Did you hear that whispered cry? Those echoes of degradation As pungent tears surged forth expelled in memoried murmurs from a melancholy soul The beleaguered sighs seized by the last tormented gasp Released in anguished liberation, to taste the bittersweet goodbye Left to savour the offerings of an unadulterated love To taste the scent of the crimson skies As the sweet aroma enthrals the senses Softly beckoning closer ever closer In a promise of enlightenment That final freedom! And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Nice way to look at the situation. Liked the way you approached it. You expressed the feel of freedom from the onset of the poem. Nice write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Freedom wasn't the original thought with this one but I see your point. Thanks, I appreciate your thoughts! And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice descriptive writing...James |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
good stuff...good stuff.....freedom is what we all seek..and we all find freedom in a different place i believe... great write my friend.. hugs, g |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Yes, but freedom from what? Thank you my friend. Good to see you reading again, now if we can just get you to write! i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right, |
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missmisery61 Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 56 |
"In a promise of enlightenment that final freedom" I believe that each person that reads something, interprets it differently than the next. To me, this piece is about death. I only wish I knew the answer to the one phrase above. Is there any final freedom and does the promise really exist? I enjoyed this much! So lord I see you grinnin' must be grand always winning....AIC |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You are of course correct! Enjoyed your thoughts, thanks! i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right, just know i'd die to be with you tonight ~ sandford [This message has been edited by EagleOne (07-22-2003 07:07 AM).] |
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